Reviews for Tired |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I know you out those two in your book and I want the first copy hahahahahah |
![]() ![]() ![]() Naruto can definitely make more than 10 clones. Doesn't Gamabunta have two sons though? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sakura shouldn't know Naruto contains Kyuubi |
![]() ![]() ![]() I’d have went ahead and greenlighted his ass |
![]() ![]() ![]() what happen to that eye technique Naruto had that made everyone scared. |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG I was so engrossed with this it took me literally 24hrs to finish. One of the best fanfic storys I've read and I can't wait for the next part |
![]() ![]() You claim your story is adventure and romance not angsty teenage bullshit, unnecessary drama, and forced plot retardedness, I can tell right now this story is going to be abandoned, there is no way it won't be with hoe you've forced so much retardedness and pots holes into you're clearly going g to get to a point where you can't force anymore, either that or you are going to make some piss poor super quick wrap up that is going to be even more retarded than the rest of the story |
![]() ![]() Jesus fucking christ if you have Naruto forgive him than he will be a pathetic piece of shit and will be a disgusting piece of trash and your story will be beyond fucking retarded. |
![]() ![]() Good God work on your pacing, or start after the scene if your going to just rush through a recap dumbass. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hmmm this sucks, on one hand really good story from what I read but on the other hand the writing is so bad i distracts from the story itself... |
![]() ![]() the writing is horrible, it keeps ruining any form of immersion in the story |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good story. Thx for writing it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I forgot how terrible your writing is like dear God |
![]() ![]() ![]() I mean... he did result to using the Kyuubi. so it is his fault. he doesn't have any right to complain |
![]() ![]() ![]() This Sasuke is… tolerable? I’m actually surprised. |