Reviews for Tired
Kisaki Sakura chapter 4 . 1/9/2016
I have to stop here... Your idea was quite good, but it is obvious that you are not well versed within the Narutovers. Many things you wrote were impossible - you ignored rules of this world and made secret techniques canon.
Beside that in the series it is clearly stated that you need years to learn elemental techniques, the Kage Bushin no Jutsu is a secret technique, sealed away by the Hokage and is known by only thew. To make an exercise out of it is absolutly unlogical. Furthermore it has nothing to do with chackra control! The reason why Naruto is that good at it, is, because he has too little chackra control and lots of chackra to spare, thus is able to create an army.
And I don't even want to start on the OOC - and I don't mean Naruto but everyone else.
Guest chapter 16 . 1/2/2016
naruto sa gia tre elementi e kiba deve ancora cominciare!ahahahahah
Guest chapter 9 . 1/1/2016
naruto ormai e grande e sa badare a se stesso xke i genitori ancora un segreto?naruto e in grado di tenere l info x se stesso
Guest chapter 8 . 1/1/2016
tsunade sta diventando uno stalker e hinata dov'e finita?
Guest chapter 7 . 1/1/2016
c'e' un jutsu controllo nascite?questi ninja hanno davvero di tutto!
StyxUA chapter 4 . 12/25/2015
Starting from 4th chapter this story is boring like hell.
zex13401jd chapter 1 . 12/23/2015
horrendous grammar... T_T
DavidC20OfficialWriter chapter 1 . 12/20/2015
Naruto decided to make an statement to himself, he's now deciding what is best for him and now he's going to face the most dangerous challenge!
Guest chapter 1 . 11/23/2015
Don't write again please.
Guest chapter 1 . 10/20/2015
dafaq? Introduction could have been better and I'm hoping your not bashing Naruto fnafics have a thing for bashing people especially Sakura who really was just introduced badly improvement AS well as growth from fangirl wasn't explained possibly giving people a positive outlook on Sakura
Kyoya hatake chapter 2 . 10/16/2015
Your grammar is horrible . ...
Wolfone10 chapter 9 . 10/16/2015
Lets take a quick look at team 7... Sasuke lost to Haku, almost committed suicide when facing zabuza, lost to the snow guy's bodyguards, lost to the rajin sword, lost to orochimaru, lost to garaa, it's no wonder that no uchiha have ever been hokage, all they seem to be good at is LOSING! I mean come on, sasuke was present at snow and wave.. Yet it's Naruto that got a bridge named after him and got a diaymo to love him, sasuke might as well noit even been present! Konoha is the ONLY place that gives two shits about the shit stain! Nobody else on the PLANET gives a crap about that worthless DEAD clan. Seriously what kinda clan gets wiped out by a TEENAGER(who is dying and going blind) in one night? That's just pathetic!
Raikaguken chapter 24 . 9/10/2015
ooh the blanks have been filled quite good and it will put even Jiraiya to shame
Raikaguken chapter 7 . 9/9/2015
raikage did'nt get sleep from them
bigfan22 chapter 1 . 9/3/2015
After reading your later works, it's obvious you were just getting your feet wet as a writer with this one. Overall it wasn't a bad story, it just wasn't as well written as the other fics I have read from you.
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