|Reviews for A Line in the Sand|
| Maistyria chapter 8 . 8/20/2012
I didn't understand at the start, but as I read through the chapters everything started to come together. I feel so sad for all of them. I hope that you will continue and be able to update soon. It is a compelling story. Cheers!
| trrblerappergrl chapter 8 . 6/29/2011
There's an unusual realness to your characters that I've come to appreciate through this fic. I think you've mastered their overall personalities, reactions, and the core of who they are. MANY KUDOS. I really appreciated the comparisons between Gippal and Baralai in this chapter, particularly in terms of how each delivers affection and I think in many respects you really personified each.
Further, I like that these were sparks you wove throughout and how in a flashback format (much earlier in the fic) you alluded to Baralai's regret for doing what he did when he did, implying that the regret came from timing and nothing else. Regardless, I look forward to reading more!
| recey2010 chapter 8 . 6/28/2011
Beautifully written chapter I absolutely adored this ! it completely brilliant, the best love scene btw rikku and baralai ever and its too damn gorgeous to be called a lemon EXCELLENT! and i trully hope you update ASAP !
| recey2010 chapter 7 . 6/15/2011
ooooh talk about DRAMA I had a sneakin suspicion but the way u set it up made it so suspenseful and climactic! PLEASE iM BEGGIN UPDATE ASAP
| justanothername chapter 7 . 5/23/2011
This fic is outstanding so far. I really appreciated the small foreshadowing you used to lead into the story and I felt it was a really great twist to have Gippal have had an affair with Paine. I really hope you finish it. I also appreciate the style you have in your writing. There's a definite unique quality in your writing, a good flavour. Further, I think you managed to capture each of the characters very well. Good work!
I look forward to reading more!
| K chapter 7 . 5/3/2011
This was outstanding. I read your fic early last week and it still stuck with me. I hope you decide to continue it in the not-distant future, you have a real gift with writing.
| K chapter 7 . 4/27/2011
This was outstanding! But I can't help but want more! Well done. I really appreciate your style of writing and how you describe the scene; I can visualize it.
| JingYee chapter 7 . 1/22/2011
I'm going to go nuts if you don't update again soon! . I went back and re-read all the previous chapters, and now I can't wait to see how you develop this story more. Please please please continue
| graceypooh chapter 7 . 1/21/2011
awww this chapter was so sad cried so much
| Miesie-chan chapter 6 . 5/22/2009
O your story is interesting
there isn't very much Rippal though but I can wait a little longer
can't wait for the next chappie
| Songsa chapter 6 . 5/20/2009
Aww, why did the chapter have to be so short? It was good and well written, but too short! Please update soon. D
| JingYee chapter 5 . 5/5/2009
I hope you update again sometime soon! This looks pretty interesting so far, and I'm looking forward to reading more. :)
| Songsa chapter 5 . 2/25/2009
Aww, this was such a beautifully written chapter. I love how you described Paine. You kept her so perfectly in character. I'm really looking forward to how you're going to develop this story. I like it even more now that this seems to be shaping into one of my favorite pairings, even though they will probably be very minor compared to Baralai and Rikku.
Once again, good chapter. I can't wait to read more.
| Songsa chapter 3 . 12/7/2008
Well, you have written another well-written and descriptive chapter. But, I feel that you could have done more with this. What I mean by that is: It was fairly short and nothing has really changed. It's been three chapters and Rikku is still sitting at the same table. The only thing that's changed is she's finally ordered something. This chapter might have been a good time to finally bring in Baralai (If he's coming at all) or maybe bring him in the last paragraph as a cliffhanger. That way you would have some more development in this chapter.
Still looking forward to your next chapter,
| aR-Ka-iC chapter 2 . 8/22/2008
I love it. Your writing style is so informative without over doing. The vivid imagery is amazing. Update soon!