Reviews for The Gap
HolmesAndWatsonAwkwardHug chapter 1 . 10/17/2009
A great story. Very good.
Wildfire2 chapter 1 . 1/26/2009
Short. Very short. Good though, you summed it up well.

Wildfire
Solitaire42 chapter 1 . 8/5/2008
I demand a follow up! After Narnia, of course.

(I don't really demand it, just request it with a FANTASTICALLY effective puppy-dog look.)
Charli800 chapter 1 . 8/1/2008
Excellently told! I loved the emotions you conveyed, although you do have a couple of language errors:

"possibly ever" - lose the "possibly", it's tautologous.

The first sentence of the third last paragraph is also a bit confusing.

Those stood out the most for me, but they didn't detract much from the imagery. Lovely work.
MyBlueOblivion chapter 1 . 8/1/2008
Hmm, that was a bit different... I like it.

You managed to fit quite a lot of thought and emotion into a very small space, which is quite difficult in itself. Your writing style flows well, and you showed a nice deep, emotive vocabulary to boot. Very nicely done (and I didn't even spot any mistakes, so, kudos!)

Do you think you'll do more with this? Maybe a continuation for after LWW? Jus' a thought...

~MyBlueOblivion~