|Reviews for Sleepless|
| Ravus Sapiens chapter 4 . 11/6
I half expected it to be one of Holly's dreams... That would explain how Artemis suddenly gained any kind of upper body strength (Holly even remarks on it),as well as why his explaination of the personality chip was so... un-technical; Holly's imagination simply didn't have the capabilty of (or felt the need to) filling in the blanks.
Anyway, I really liked your story. Some constructive criticism: if you plan on doing more lemons, you should make the sex-scenes slower, describe how they undress each other, how they feel each other, foreplay is key.
A more detailed "guide" can be found here: arts/how-to-write-a-sex-scene.
| Guest chapter 4 . 7/12
You did give me explicit permission, so here goes. THE AI, OR ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCE WOULD BE STORED IN THE OPERATING SYSTEM SO AS TO NOT BE INTERFERED WITH BY SOFTWARE BLOCKING EXTERNAL CODE! ALSO, uhhh... That's about it. You could have looked this up tho.
| Necro Floodwaters chapter 4 . 11/23/2014
I loved it! It was wonderfully written in my opinion and I'm following it just in case someone else gives you know inspiration to continue it! I really do hope someone does!
| Anon chapter 4 . 9/1/2013
Excellent, fantastic, wonderful, and every other synonym! A!
| Guest chapter 4 . 8/4/2013
| dmr14wizkid chapter 4 . 7/7/2013
| InconsistencyIsMySpecialty chapter 4 . 6/18/2013
I loved this little story it was so sweet what Artemis had said to Holly you're and amazing writer btw
| canagg chapter 1 . 6/9/2013
I sometimes send links to my friend to fanfics here and she hates this kind of stuff while I, on the otherhand, don't really care.
I am sooo tempted to send this to her!
| swiftmask chapter 4 . 4/12/2013
i love "Artemis Fowl in blue jeans should be classified as a deadly weapon!"
| elyteracy chapter 4 . 4/12/2013
First I'm actually not english, but french, so if you coul excuse my language mistakes that would be great.
Anyway, I really liked your story. It's well written and funny. Plus,the idea of tranforming Holly in human was pretty interesting. But, I think that Artemis should be a bit more shy. I mean, it is his first time right? And, he never ever had a girlfriend before. So, that seems logical.
Except for this detail that was really good!
| xander the irish chapter 4 . 3/28/2013
please finish this romance between artemis fowl and holly short I want to see a chapter 5 I do not have a weak stomach bot a really horny tmi you should just delete this part of the review but I enjoy it I cant stop reading I gross myself out with yet I still like it
and yes im really irish like artemis
| Guest chapter 4 . 3/28/2013
when do I not like being horny. well actually around my girlfriend she hates those.i like I really do you have my full support
and yes im really irish
| drizma chapter 4 . 3/21/2013
| Phenixkiller chapter 4 . 2/24/2013
The pervert inside my head wants to tell this:
" I LOVED your story, please continue, and Add some " special" stuff to your story, the hotter it gets, the better it is
| bakugirl chapter 4 . 2/23/2013
the lemon was very well done