|Reviews for Once, Elsewhere|
| Oracle Five chapter 1 . 8/5/2008
Well, I'm in the neighborhood, so here - have some more concrit from me! ~_~
Okay, first of all I should tell you that I have no idea what Generator Grawl is; it never came up in my anime clubs. Secondly, the fact that I had no idea what was going on didn't effect my read of the story at all; the description's very good and I was able to picture the scene in my head very well.
Let's see, what else can I comment on...no obvious grammar issues, nothing too funky with spelling, and I kind of wish this was just the first chapter of several. I think you said it would be a oneshot, though, so there goes that thought.