Wonderful explicit story, I wished there is an animation on this

Hot

There is not much of good stories to this amazing pairing. I really find myself excied by this one and possibly even more on your intention of making more grom this oneshot. It was lovely, feelings and all. So make another one, pretty please?

OMFG! You don't know how much i love you right know! You are the only one who wrote any kind of Hotohori/Miaka love story. PLEASE add on more; and PLEASE let them marry and have many kids. You are the best.

I'm feling myself...let's say turned one?

It felt good to read.

love it

Yummy, hot, and so sweet!

WHAT A FIC..!

So sweet..!

Aww~ Sweet and delicous 8D

-The Epic Writer

Whoo! Steamy romance, in-character and well-written. Definitely going onto my Favorites list! *applause*

Aww! So sweet and wonderful

Please do a sequal!

*grins and shows her ID card*

Thought I should prove that I'm plenty old enough to read and review this very sensual and steamy one shot. :D

I like to see you stretching your wings (no Suzaku pun intended) in writing about the different seishi. Hotohori's feelings for Miaka are very much in character, and I thought you did an especially good job in setting a sweet and tender mood for this coupling. I especially liked the line 'they became one mind, one body, one soul...one complete being.' That was a very lovely and romantic way to set up the expression of their love.

Also liked the exchange of glances...it speaks of another story in the making while bringing this one to a close. _~

As always, I have a bit of concrit to offer. *slaps on beta cap* Here goes!

You did an excellent job in setting the mood, but there was one issue that kept distracting/keeping me from becoming totally absorbed in the moment...and that was the question of Miaka's status as a miko. My assumption in reading was that this scene is occuring inthe context of the original story. That means it wouldn't have just been a matter of Hotohori controlling his 'baser instincts', but also of him knowing that Miaka had to stay a virgin in order to summon Suzaku. As Emperor, he feels a keen responsibility to protect his people, and that fact would definitely affect his decision making regarding becoming intimate with her.

To that end, my suggestion would be to put something in the narrative that will answer a FY fan's question as to why he and Miaka would be ignoring that rule. (One example: perhaps this is happening when Suzaku has been sealed away by Yui and they all are about to go to war?) I know this probably seems pretty nitpicky, but for me it's always been a crucial/essential point in establishing the credibility of any non canon pairing in a story of any length.

*doffs beta cap*

This is only my opinion, offered for whatever it might be worth to you. Heck, you know I'm not a stickler for canon. P lol Alternate Reality is a favorite genre, so I'm quite happy to picture this in that pov...

I'm very pleased to see that you're writing as much as you are; imho, nothing hones a writer's skills better than experience, practice and friendly concrit! *grin* In any case, thank you for sharing your creativite talents. I'm looking forward to reading your TasMia story...:D

Every good wish,

Lynne (aka KittyLynne and MOK on this site _~)