|Reviews for All Seems Beautiful|
| SeanyMac23 chapter 20 . 3/6
So I saw this story recommended on the Digimon subreddit a few weeks ago and have finally caught up. I really have to say that I love it, I always read it on my phone during my train ride to and from work and it actually always made the ride go a lot faster so I definitely thank you for that. Now the hard part is going to be waiting like normal people haha. One question I do have is that I see that you used the Japanese names for all the chosen children as well as DNA Digivolution (Jogress), but kept the English versions of the digimon's names is there any particular reason you chose to do this? Just curious.
As per your request before chapter 17 here are my favorite/least favorite chapters and why:
Favorite: (Chapter 20) I know there's not much action going on in this chapter, but I really love it because it focuses on the relationships between the different chosen and their different interactions. You write this stuff really well and it feels authentic to the original series, if not a slight improvement. The children themselves and their relationships with each other are always what have driven my interest in these fics so naturally a chapter that pushes action and digimon to the background would be favorite haha. I found the reveal about Daisuke's sexuality both surprising and really true to how you've written him so far thus making what could've been a really awkward forced thing into something great. Also the Mimi rejection by Jou seemed to fit in perfectly with who these characters are at this point in the story.
Least Favorite: (Chapter 13) I found this to be my least favorite for many of the same reasons Chapter 20 was my favorite, a large amount of the focus was on the digimon and their battle against Baihumon. I find battle scenes very tough to like in print mediums as they are such a heavily visual aspect of a story that it's tough to translate to print. This isn't to say you did a bad job at all, but it just didn't work for me as well as the interpersonal interactions between the chosen children.
I hope this helps (even though I wrote an essay haha.)
| Allynca chapter 20 . 3/4
First, my apologies for not reviewing this sooner. Unlike Taichi, I'm in the process of reverse digitizing. Real life has become so hectic I've all but disappeared from cyber space. In any case, I'm sort of glad I didn't review right away as it has given me time to read this a second time and really let it digest. At first, I was disappointed by the lack of action in the chapter. Don't get me wrong, I love when you focus on their personal lives. But after my first read, this really just felt like a massive filler. I don't feel that way anymore, by the way. I think it's probably just that it's been so long since I read the last chapter that I was expecting to fall back into the thick of things. This story does tend to crawl along, but it's so worth it for all the personal moments you let us see.
The relationships in this chapter, as in the rest of this story, are crafted beautifully. Taichi and Yamato are so done so perfectly and I really love the subplot you've created for Yamato. Although I'm sure his commitment is far from wavering, I really like the progress he made in this chapter.
The dreams moment was a nice touch. It made for some really beautiful writing and took us back from the intimacy of the writing, allowing us to consider how the Chosens' lives fit into a grander scheme. I am confident about who a few of the dreams belong to, but I'm uncertain on the others. Any chance you might share in a PM? I'd tell you my guesses here but I think this review is going to be long enough as it is, heh. A long chapter deserves a long review, right?
Another thing that took a second read for me to process was the Daisuke revelation. At first, I didn't really like it. I'm kind of treading deep water when I consider how to put this, but I guess I just didn't see that in his character based off the actual seasons. I realize this is fanfiction of course, but I always appreciate when things adhere at least semi-closely to the canon. After a second read though, I had to admit that you crafted it quite well and that in your story, it really works. And that it is not so far a cry from the series, all things considered. I mean Daisuke has always adored Taichi and he's older now in your story... Honestly, I think I'm just making excuses because you made me uncomfortable. I ship Daisuke with someone else so it was a bit jarring at first. I'm rambling now but I should just say that if anyone can pull it off, you can. And it really does add a wonderful twist to your story. The moment between Ken and Daisuke was especially lovely.
Also, just throwing this in here, but I love the way you write Ken's character so much.
I think I should about wrap this up, though I'm sure I could find more to ramble about. Like the Jyomui thing! But perhaps I will leave your other reviewers to cover that. Beautifully penned, by the way. I don't think I need to say more. Overall, great chapter! The inclusion of all the characters and step back from the unfoldings of the central plot made for a really warm fuzzy kind of chapter.
I'm eager to see what comes next.
| Tanya Takaishi chapter 20 . 3/4
I've finally caught up! I think I read through 6 chapters without a review so I'll try to include some thoughts about everything here.
I'm glad Yamato has decided to join the team - I hope it sticks! I was really frustrated with him during the whole monster chasing saga. Tai almost got eaten and he's playing gigs at coffee shop, ugh. Also, I felt so awful for poor Gabumon - the conversation Sora had with him was very sweet and I loved that you touched upon the differences between the digimon and humans - the digimon having one dream. They were created for the sole purpose of being with their partners as far as we understand the history. Its a sad, but beautiful thing and it makes Yamato's distance from Gabumon that much more heartbreaking.
The way you write Ken and Daisuke's relationship is always beautiful. I was sad the last couple chapters, but the moment in the canoe here was gorgeous. I loved how Ken was deemed brave, and Daisuke kind. Very poignant. And while I've seen evidence of Daisuke's crush on Taichi (although it could've just been hero-worship as usual), I was a bit surprised he came out in the chapter. I think I was expecting him to confide in Ken about being confused or at least bisexual rather than gay, especially given his crush on Kari in the past which is oddly never mentioned in this story. Was that supposed to be a cover-up? It just seems odd that his sister and Ken both saw it, but there was barely anything to show us Daisuke was struggling with that secret besides his feelings for Tai. I want more - just because he is my favorite character and I feel like it needs more to be believable. I get the feeling Ken has feelings for Daisuke (whether he realizes it himself or not is another question) and I can see that happening given their connection. The Taisuke thing seems one-sided for sure. Poor Daisuke doesn't have the best luck in love, does he? Interested to see how it all plays out.
I'm crushed by the failed Jyoumi moment. :( I'm hoping Jyou will come around eventually. Mimi's comments about their past made me very sentimental. Jyou's list scene with Sora was adorable and frustrating as well. I love their friendship!
I feel like I need a little more Sora in general. And Iori! He seemed non-existent in this chapter. Of course, I know how hard it is to write soooo many digimon and people and get everyone equal screen time. Its hard as hell. And I'm not complaining, because Daisuke got LOTS of screen time and he is my love. Just hoping to see more in upcoming chapters of the others.
I get that there is some more stuff going on with Tai/Yamato and I'm thinking Sora is involved when it comes to Tai's kissing history, (lol.) But we shall see.
I love Hikari and Takeru's dynamic btw. Their moment after Hikari is almost killed was really sweet. I'm intrigued by the power of Light (I'm guessing) and how it will play out in this story.
Can't wait to see what action is next in store.
| BladeMasterAd chapter 20 . 3/3
Firstly, let me say that I'm not sure why I waited more than a year to review your chapters. I get so caught up in the excitement of a new chapter, and then reading and processing what I just read that once I get to the end I forget that reviewing is a thing.
Secondly, let me say that as always, I super look forward to your updates. It was funny, I was finishing up some fanfic reading on Sunday night before you posted, and was thinking...damn I wish ASB would get an update right now...that'd be perfect timing...alas one day early...but I was looking forward to it the entire week (knowing that I wouldn't get time to read it until Saturday).
So as I always do with ASB, I settled in and started in from my favourite chapter that I remember (i believe 13...appearance of Omnimon and Gennai) upto the current update. Which was kind of mistake because I started reading at 11pm, and didn't finish until 3 am...
Your other chapters were great, no issue with them, read multiple times each.
The first time I read chapter 20 I was...I duno..the Daisuke thing threw me off. I expected that subplot to resolve itself differently. While it didn't come out of left field, since I could see the hints/foreshadowing...I personally don't like it. I don't know enough to say, but Daisuke is at an age of experimentation and finding himself...I think it would have been more appropriate (and believable/relatable) to declare himself as possibly gay, instead of more definitive. I don't judge, but I don't normally like stories that include it, because it normally becomes a focus that I find unnecessary (though not wrong in any way, since for a character its obviously something they would think about in one way or another). In reading other reviews, I can say that the possible hints of other characters being gay as well...possibly misdirection? I don't know. However I will say its not realistic to all of a sudden have all the team or guys or most of them come out...I don't know what your plans for that are, but just..be careful...its a fine line.
Sections I enjoyed were the conversation between Taichi and Yamato, especially the argument. I thought that was a great piece of writing. Taichi recognizing Yamato's struggle to balancing, and then Yamato's agreement to himself that Taichi was right...very good moments.
There was the sequence from about the chosen and their dreams that was also really poignant for me. The first time I read it though it depressed me. I've always dreamed of having a set of friends like the chosen, who are almost like one big happy family. But that piece of writing brought back to reality the fact that they are a team, but in the end they are individuals with separate hopes and dreams, who will probably have to cast off or separate somewhat from their chosen friends to follow their own dreams. And that realization in fiction is something I can relate to in my personal life as some of my friends have moved past me and I also scale my own individual professional/educational goals.
Although, the descriptions of their dreams were not all so easy to match up with chosen. But here are my guesses. I would like to know where I'm wrong:
Of sending his tired, hardworking mother, who clipped every picture of Paris from her magazines, on a trip to see the real thing. - Takeru
Of sharing the secret that caused most of his headaches, as if it had grown so large that it pushed against the walls of his cranium until they fractured. - Daisuke
Of traveling to different countries. Of speaking at least two languages and achieving moderate fluency in three more. - This was a tough one. By process of elimination, Mimi.
Of being about two inches shorter. - Miyako
Of being two inches taller, and becoming more like the brother who had been her shelter whether the storm lashed or a spring shower caught her unawares. - Hikari
Of fixing all his mistakes, going back in time and stopping himself, no matter what that took, no matter how it changed his future. - Ken
Of proving herself to her mother without changing for her. - Sora
Of stability. - Iori
Of having a thousand friends and never being lonely, ever again. - Tough one - Matt (maybe Izzy?)
Of letting loose a barbaric howl that slashed the night air to ribbons. - Matt? Tough again.
Of kisses on a park bench amid binders of long Latin words and fortifying cups of coffee. - Jyou
Of being followed, and leading them all to a better, stronger place. - Taichi
I commented on this to you before, but I've always enjoyed your writing of interactions between characters that we never always saw interacting in the show much. The mid chapters reminded me how much I liked your writing of Sora and Izzy discussing things when fighting Baihumon, or the Joe/Sora combo from the restaurant and then with Ken and Izzy.
But it did also remind me of two characters who I have not seen interact alot in at least 7 chapters. Tai and Sora. For best friends (or maybe not in this universe, as Matt/Tai are super close) they haven't much time for each other. Now, I ship Taiora, so I secretly have hoped thats where this fic goes (and would pay you money to do it if your on the fence), but even beyond that there seems to be a dearth of interaction between the two which I found strange. I thought I recalled from much earlier on that maybe Tai/Sora were working out their feelings for one another and just avoiding each other as they do it...but I forget if that even happened in this fic.
I do remember a throwaway line between Yamato and Tai discussing Tai's dating of that girl Shioka and the real reason Tai hadn't kissed anyone since...I wasn't sure if that was a reference to Tai's feelings for Sora, but on re-reading it so many times it was something that jumped out at me.
Joe's response to Mimi btw, was...not unexpected, but his logic was not very good in my opinion. I do wish we had gotten to hear the one other way in which he and Mimi are different..I hope that gets revealed later on. I did note that Tai and Mimi seem to be fairly close in this fic and on multiple occasions very touchy feely (hugging and playing and everything) which I thought was cute/interesting. I ship Taiora like I said, but I guess Michi would be ok.
Anyways, these are my ramblings at 12am where I am after reading chapter 20 for a second time. I wish the updates weren't every 3 months, but they have always been worth the wait!
| The Keeper of Worlds chapter 20 . 3/1
Wow, did NOT see that coming like that for Davis! Well done:)
| Zenthisoror chapter 20 . 2/27
My goodness! I'm such an idiot - I put this in my favourites then completely forgot to follow, so I shall remedy that.
I've been enjoying this story so much, for the drama, for the plot, the way you can turn a sentence (especially for, haha, Taicho's brand of wit) and for the snippets of slice of life.
Taichi and Yamato's friendship, or bromance (I see it as a beautiful bromance anyway) comes across very well, and to be fair, Yamato's my favourite character. I like the conflict you've set up between his commitments to the team and to his band - even though deep down I'm rolling my eyes and fighting the urge to shout, "Chosen children any day!" The balance between managing the real world and remaining committed to the Digitial World is something I would've liked to have seen 02 Adventure handle better, and you're doing it very nicely. Not just with these two, but Mimi, Joe, Sora and everybody.
I guess I've always liked Yamato since the cave scene in the first series, so I'm glad you touched it on a few chapters back. Always thought it was a pretty powerful metaphor for a kid's show, and the endless pit to nowhere scared me a lot more than the ocean.
Now! To review this chapter: Loved every minute of the camping trip so far. The description of the kids in the canoes was vivid and bright and authentic (although sometimes with Daisuke and Ken I got confused with who was in the front or back of the canoe, but that's just my reading) and Taichi hamming it up in a feather boa was a beautiful scene. Mimi's answer that femme fatales are born potty-trained was priceless.
It was good to see Daisuke and Ken come to an understanding, even if nobody 'won' in the standoff of viewpoints as such. Actually, kudos here for making Daisuke so likeable in this fiction. I couldn't stand him in the original!
Mimi as well isn't so bad either. She always struck me as so vapid and useless (until she took on the big sister mentor role in 02), but here I even felt a little bad for her and how it went with Joe. I even hope it works out for them - they'd be a hilarious couple!
...on the subject of relationships, well, Daisuke - well, why not? Good he's finally got that off his chest.
Still on tenterhooks for working out the meaning of that poem, and all in all, if I haven't said it before, thank you for all you have written so far - this story has been a joy to read and I look forward to next time.
| Thespurgin chapter 20 . 2/26
okay, that caught me off guard...
As did the apparent fact that Tai isn't vanishing much. Did that angle get dropped or just massively reduced from what I felt before?
| Potgenie chapter 20 . 2/26
Woo hoo! An update! :) I love long chapters, so this was a great read. I really liked Daisuke and Ken's conversation at the end. It's interesting how this will turn out, given that up till now Taichi's sexuality in this story is still a big question mark to us readers. I also thought Ken was gay/bi somewhere in the middle of this fic, but I think I may have been reading too much into things.
Reading about Yamato and Gabumon made me really sad too. It's so realistic it hurts.
And Taichi is still digitizing. That sucks :(
I'm hooked! Can't wait for the next chapter! ;)
| Berry Doyle chapter 20 . 2/25
To answer the riddle, I'm going to say 'you' (or fanfic authors in general). So here is your metaphorical ambrosia.
Whew, that was quite a long chapter. But I somehow made it through the whole thing, in two and a half sittings, on my phone. It will probably be the highlight of my day.
Your writing makes me laugh a lot. You are so very witty and clever. I especially liked the parts about Daisuke's facial color. They were very creative. I think watermelon was my favorite.
I am also glad that Daisuke and Ken made up. I don't like it when they're fighting. It makes me sad for them.
| Angelfish369 chapter 20 . 2/24
Was the cell phone comment for me? :p haha I just got home when I saw your update and almost wanted to read it on my phone before dinner. good thing I didn't...took 2 hours to finish it! and of course in one sitting! how can I stop in the middle? :D
hmm...where to begin? well I actually quite enjoyed this pace you set in this chapter. with so much stuff going on previously, you almost need a break to just slow down, get people's loose ends and relationships patched up, hear what they have to say and think, etc. your captivating writing style is as persistent as ever. there's a nice fluidity, forward motion with how you deliver your lines. I am making no sense what I am referencing specifically is that part where Sora thinks of how humans and digimon differ in their dreams and aspirations, that coupled with how gabumon is feeling. something about that simple, innocent, loyal devotion the digimon have towards their partners made it almost tragic that humans grow up in their separate world and leave the digimon behind. it was especially bad because I was imagining gabumon's face in that scene. to me, gabumon arguably has the cutest pouty face of all the digimon, and "crest of friendship" might be my favourite episode, so with gabumon's relationship with Yamato in mind it was just heartbreaking. I felt a bit bad that when Sora was listing off the humans' dreams, I could figure out who thinks what for most of them but not all.
I should mention that I love your Sora here. She knows how to care for those around her without being overbearing, like realizing that Taichi might be secretly upset but not bug him about it, or go look for gabumon who needs someone to talk to.
ok back to the start. it's soooo hard to be Yamato. no matter what he thinks now, he can't fully have both. all hell is gonna break loose during his big show and you'll make him choose then, won't you? TT either way he will hurt someone and himself. if he rushes off to be a digidestined, he will grow to resent being one and we get another showdown between him and Taichi. if he sticks with the band something is gonna happen to Taichi and he will be guilty forever after thinking he could have prevented it. tough tough situation. can't wait to see how you handle this mess!
Not sure what I think about the Jyou/Mimi situation. I wonder if she really likes Jyou as he is now, or if she is just clinging to a memory of close to a decade ago. other people have written stories, and I think this also, that if there are no more threats to their worlds, the tie that binds this group of kids who would otherwise never be friends will stretch really thin. sometimes it's almost an obligation to meet up to honour what they went through together, but do they have anything else making them stay together other than this event that happened eons ago? on the other hand, there is true friendship coursing between them here, so it was really great to see.
now the shocker: Daisuke! please PLEASE do not turn this into a Taisuke! other than your version of Daisuke here which I like, I really cannot stand him otherwise especially in the canon, so Taisuke is painful to tolerate! plus daisuke's adoration of taichi is just so cute that having that affection returned will ruin the cuteness of the worship :p Daisuke and Ken cracked me up in this chapter though! what with Ken's descriptions of Daisuke's various shades of blushing and how they admire Taichi's shirtlessness (I am grinning like an idiot at this moment...yummm shirtless taichi!). aside from that, so glad they patched up their friendship! I was a bit pissed off at Ken's coldness given how hard Daisuke was trying (yes I was actually cheering on daisuke here...what have you done to me?) but that scene on the canoe (rowboat?) was so well done, what with Ken snapping and baring his soul and Daisuke's very simple embrace that just made time stand still. I forgave Ken when I found out he had a birthday present prepared for Daisuke all along though :D
I should stop writing now haha...by the way how did they construct a gummy bear tower? I can't even make a two-bear tower! and as always, don't leave your loyal fans hanging for too long please! I can't wait to find out what surprise you have brewing for the Act I finale. how many acts have you planned out? is this gonna become one of those 100-chapter epics? :D
| crestoflight3 chapter 20 . 2/24
I can't even express how much I enjoyed this chapter. From Yamato and Taichi at the beginning, to the beginning of the camp-out, to the Harry Potter references...it was just a joy to read. And I'm surprised at how much I enjoy the idea that Daisuke is gay. I normally don't go for fan-speculated sexual orientations, but...I dunno, I just think, of all of them, Daisuke makes the most sense, in a way.
Great job, and keep writing!
| LILFOC chapter 20 . 2/24
Welcome back this was a great chapter!
| JapanManiaz chapter 20 . 2/24
Since you esp. mention us phone readers, I just had to review. It was engaging and interesting, so I had no trouble at all reading this in one sitting. All the love troubles make for a very sad cast, but the way you showed it all, through describing their feelings are very good! I hoped Ken and Taichi could be a little more aware of their feelings though... Well, writing this is far more painful than reading 'cause my phone is slow as hell, so I have to end here. Sorry I didn't login; was just torture to my old type phone.
| Tanya Takaishi chapter 14 . 2/10
I hope I can remember all the thoughts I've had since I last reviewed. First off I must say that your abililty to write descriptively - the imagery of the setting, the people, the digimon... make everything feel more real than I have ever felt Digimon to be - fanfic or anime. You really have an incredible way with words and it makes me want to go back and edit my own writing as I now am surrounded by self-doubt as most authors are when they read someone fabulous.
That being said, from Taichi and Daisuke (those two together at all times make me very happy) getting attacked by Gonmon, down to the sword exchange with Baihumon was all just amazing. The digiworld is suddenly very scary and real to me, but I also love it so much more. I was mostly moved by a couple chapters back when Yamato rescued Taichi - especially when they thought Gaururmon was done for. Their friendship was wonderful here and it was nice to see since we haven't seen as much of Yamato interacting with Tai as other characters since he's been so busy. The moment with Osamu - whatever he is - was terrifying and I can't wait to see how that plays with everything.
Gennai and everything you've created in this story about the digiworld is spot on. You've written a great combo of being vague and hinting at the ensuing chaos (muahahaha) that the suspense and mystery is killing me. I looooove it.
Um and the Joumi moment in this chapter was beautiful - who doesn't ship that ship? :D It really was nice. Also, I liked how you touched upon Miyako's thought of the other girls - she actually is the only one female who wasn't there for their first adventure, so I think her thinking was very realistic. And poor Ken - he really is getting picked on for his past throughout this thing. :( I'm wondering - since the spores have been reactivated - what about his? If I remember right, he still has one inside him as well - I think he was the one who gave that ridiculous 'if we just believe in ourselves they won't reactivate' speech at the end of the show. I'm kind of hoping (just because I love dark stuff) that he's affected somehow.
Shoot, there was so much more I know I'm forgetting. Just know that your writing is fabulous - you need to write an original novel so I can buy it - and I can tell how much thought you've put into this. WELL DONE! I'm off to try to catch up!
| Tanya Takaishi chapter 8 . 2/3
Oh wow, what a way to end this chapter. I think I read through a few chapters without leaving reviews, so I'll try to remember what I thought - Tai falling down the steps and then not sharing with anyone why sounds about right given the circumstances. As optimistic as Hikari and Daisuke are, I have a feeling Ken is right about him. I liked how you fit in Daisuke's happiness at Hikari being part of "his team". Its an interesting dynamic that I liked reading about. And Ken's brother? What an interesting twist, I can't wait to see what plays out here.
I thoroughly enjoyed the scene with Iori getting bombarded by all the girls in this chapter as well as his conversation with Noriko. You write descriptive qualities of characters so well that it makes them more real than the show ever could, ie: Tai's ears, and Noriko's features. I've really enjoyed it. I also got a kick out of Daisuke's socks. ;)
Mimi and Tai at the bakery was one of my favorite scenes. They are adorably similar in their enthusiasm for things and this spore child plot just keeps thickening. Off to read more. Hopefully I'll have time to get through this a little more quickly as I'm really enjoying it.