Reviews for Spiral Illusion
Bluesnowman chapter 3 . 2/20/2009
Good story so far.
Leaprechaun1 chapter 1 . 2/20/2009
Please answer these for me, I am not trying to be rude. Just curious.

The Uchiha massacre happened 4-5 years before Naruto graduates, so how did the third just finish setting up the massacre?

Naruto, Sakura and Sasuke were on team seven and Kurenai was sensei of team 8 so how do they get team 1?

Also, the reaon Kakashi was the sensei for that team was because he would be able to train Sasuke when he actiates the Sharingan.

Ino-Shika-Cho trio was team 10 and Kakashi was sensei for team 7 so how do they get team 2?

Also, they are an infiltration/information gatheringing team because of their clan jutsu working together.

Kiba, Hinata and Shino were on team 8 with Gai being the sensei to team 9 so, once again, how do they end up being team 3?

Also, they were made to be a tracking team because that is what all their abilities are stongest at.

Before they graduated Gai was the sensei for team 9 for almost a year so what happened to Neji, Tenten and Lee? The big thing for this is it has to be Gai that teaches Lee because of his inability to use Ninjutsu or Genjutu so who is their sensei now?

Please remember I am curious and confused and do not in anyway mean to be rude.
Kyuubi-Sama chapter 3 . 2/20/2009
This definitely an AU story. While I like the idea of a stronger and more capable Kurenai than what we ever got in the manga. Your portrayal of her in this just makes no sense with the techniques, jutsu's and shinobi position (ANBU)? she has. You've also actually made Naruto dislikable in this, as he comes across like a lazy, crybaby who throws tantrums. In your story summary on your bio page, you said this was going to be a Naruto/Kurenai pairing. But then you have Kurenai mentioning her "boyfriend" in chapter 2. So I take it that's not happening, which is a shame because it was one of your better original ideas for this story than some of the others I've read so far. I really hope this doesn't end being another Naruto/Sakura pairing. There are way more stories with that pairing than any other except Naruto/Sasuke (shiver)? Overall, the story has promise but it also needs a lot of work too.
Colette G chapter 3 . 2/19/2009
Update Soon Please!
Aikori Shukrai chapter 3 . 2/17/2009
Interesting story, I look forward to reading more.
spiritwolf35 chapter 2 . 2/17/2009
I am sorry to say it but I vote non of those stories on your profile I read the idea about the stories and sorry but non of them seem any good specially the stories where you have Naruto paired up with Sakura why would he want to be paired up with a pink hair banshee bitch sorry but I hate that pairing even more than Naruto/Tayuya or Sasgay with Hinata but like I said sorry but non of those stories seem any good I guess think up some better ones
Innerstruggle88 chapter 3 . 2/17/2009
Nice idea's but your naruto is just to whiney! yeah i know he was a bit of a dumbass at the start of naruto canon but you make him seem like spoiled brat and it makes me cringe as i read your fic. All i can hope for is that he will go through some kind of life changing event in the next chapter that will tone him down abit cause i don't think i could read anymore of the 40 words per chapter of naruto screaming everything he say.

Great ideas so keep up the good work just hard to read
spedclass chapter 3 . 2/17/2009
Awesome chapter keep up the good work and update soon!
Akira Stridder chapter 3 . 2/16/2009
Hmm..I though Naruto would be so into training not whine like a child..I thought he would appreciate more..
Please Read my stuff chapter 3 . 2/16/2009
The Faded Line chapter 1 . 2/16/2009
nice chpter
T3Ko chapter 3 . 2/16/2009
I found this little odd by few places. But that may be because of me and how much I have read. And what team Asuma has? What was Gais originally?
FateBurn chapter 3 . 2/16/2009
good chapter.
mfmxxx chapter 3 . 2/16/2009
Seems pretty good so far.

Can't wait to see where you take it.
Fyreyes chapter 3 . 2/16/2009
Great story! I'm excited for the rest! I am curious about one minor thing though. You said that Ino, Shikamaru, and Choji had Maito Gai as a Sensei right? So if by Asuma's team do you mean Ten-Ten, Neji, and Lee? Or was that a typo and you meant to say that Ino, Shikamaru, and Choji's sensei was Asuma? Just curious.
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