|Reviews for Not a Chance|
| Nstone53 chapter 1 . 8/24/2009
| Yemi Hikari chapter 1 . 10/6/2008
Nicely written, they both were in character!
| buffycorvin chapter 1 . 8/27/2008
| Layzay the Killer chapter 1 . 8/5/2008
Thats written well, and I like the sweetness between these two. But you need to work on the dialogue, a little. It kinda feels like you were scared of making them out of character, so instead of potentially overdoing it, you kind of under did it, if that makes sense. Lance in particular sounds way too articulate. Other than that you might want to expand your vocab a bit. Good luck, and please continue, you have some talent it just needs to be polished.