|Reviews for Winter Winds|
| Katany chapter 1 . 6/7/2010
Beautifully perceptive. The silence tells as much as the conversation, even though the piece stays with Vegeta, which I think is the proper perspective for this piece. You showed the horror of Trunks' world while establishing his attachment to it, and managed to keep the piece from becoming overly dramatic. A wonderful read.
| FenixPhoenix chapter 1 . 5/16/2009
A part of Trunks that is very plausible. Love the description at the end. Good job.
| Minyonka chapter 1 . 1/29/2009
Wow, this was really thought-provoking. I like how you worded this and I really enjoyed reading it. You kept them in-character so well, which is understandibly difficult for a father-son thing when using Vegeta. I mean, it's Vegeta we're talking about. However, this was very well done. Bravo.
| LiQuYu chapter 1 . 8/23/2008
Well written. The characterization of both characters were excellent and you did an awesome job of creating the atmosphere of the story. Most people tend to go over board and make these types of stories making them overly dramatic but I thought you wrote it well. Good job!
| RandomPenName chapter 1 . 8/20/2008
So beautiful. Eloquent, and delightful. Thank you.
| KageOkami-Kogo chapter 1 . 8/18/2008
Wow! That was deep! Awesome, I loved it! Please write more like this :)
| Remembering childhood chapter 1 . 8/5/2008
I realy like the last sentences... how someone could "appreciate" his world of death and chaos because it is all he knows, it is familiar to him; that's so true.
Good work. Keep writing.
| shahi chapter 1 . 8/5/2008
That was deep and intriguing for me. Both are battle hardened warriors and had to make best of the horrible situations in their lives. In some ways they're truly alike and I like how you delved into their similarity in an unique way.
| Obelisk of Light chapter 1 . 8/5/2008
This one-shot is very touching. I especially liked the part where Trunks calls Vegeta "Papa". You've kept Vegeta very in-character and not turned him into an utter softie, which I like very much.
However, I found it odd that Vegeta refers to him as "Mirai" because it's not something that I've seen in the anime. There are also very few dialogue errors, which I shall point out for you. My corrections are enclosed in parentheses:
"Things were different after you died. Ma—Mother was a lot calmer and quieter. She spent a lot of time in her lab, though it wasn’t until later that she told me why.
(")When I was about eleven or so, the andriods were attacking and Gohan and I were close by. We tried to stop every attack. I was determined.
(")But Gohan knocked me out to go die in the rain."
Whenever the same person is speaking in different paragraphs, the beginning of those paragraphs must have quotation marks. It's necessary to end the paragraph with a quotation mark only when that person has stopped or paused speaking. There's another place in the story where you've repeated this mistake.
(")When it rained, human ash fell, and nothing could ever erase the smell of death from our homes.
("}But it was home."
This story is nearly flawless, especially in the characterisation. Overall, a delightful, short and sweet read.