|Reviews for Houses of the Holy|
| dater chapter 4 . 9/18/2008
I just came across this story now, and I must say that its the most interesting fic that I have read in awhile.
Im interested in knowing what skill level naruto truly is at the moment. Its not really clear so far.
the only thing that is clear is the level of intelligence naruto has.
| Xstarlight-dragonX chapter 4 . 9/18/2008
This story is super cool. Plus, I don't have any real complaints about your writing at all. I would write a more in depth review, but it's 4:30 in the morning right now and I don't have it in me. However, the fact that this story was so good that I read it straight through instead of bookmarking it or something should say a lot; especially since I'm really picky about story quality!
| mute thunder chapter 4 . 9/18/2008
Madara's reaction was just as I pictured it was. Naruto's growth seems a bit forced. Too serious maybe?. He's only six after all, but well I guess he'd been forced to grow up faster since there are no children around and Konan and Pain aren't "happy" people.
I wonder what Madara's intention are, seems as if he only cares about getting Kyuubi free for some reason. Time will tell I suppose.
As for lack of reviews,
well to be honest the title and summary put me slightly of as I thought that he'd be taken in by angels or other holy entities and caused me to nearly not bother with clicking on the link you'd get more hits if the summary was different. I do realise that a battlefield as old as the shinobi nations isn't really that old, but somehow I associated it with the beginning of time and what not. The baptism part only sem to encourage that view.
You are a good writer, the story flows nicely and no serious spelling errors that have caught my eye. Keep up the good work
| Lord of the Trees chapter 4 . 9/17/2008
First of all, I guess I should say that your story has no major problems. Maybe a few typoes here and there, but they hardly affect the flow of the story. Second, I wouldn't worry about lack of reviews for this story. Most people tend to use the search filter based upon what 'pairings' they like. Since Naruto & Pain aren't exactly a common pairing, they tend to overlook this fic. Also, most fanfic readers (forgive me for making a generalisation here) go for pathetic romantic crap with no substance. I've seen very few stories with more than a thousand reviews that didn't feature romance as a major element of the story. Lastly, people who read fanfics often aren't interested in the longer chapter stories. Not only are they often updated slower, but the stories usually have more depth and intricacy. As I mentioned above, the typical fanfic reader is not capable of reading such large chapters, being used to the shortness of 'fluff' pieces. So pretty much, while your story is great (no joke, it really is!), fanfic readers are lazy fools with no appreciation of decent fiction whatsoever.
There, now that my rant is done, I can actually compliment you story! Your writing style is fluid and captivating, and you don't rush any aspects of your story. I personally am quite happy with your chapter length, but I believe that I'm in the minority with that. Nevertheless, an amazing read, so don't be disheartened by lack of reviews/hits!
| apimpnamedKyuubi chapter 3 . 9/2/2008
I'm not sure if you know or not but isn't Pein's name spelled with a e instead of a or do you just like your name for him better.
Also this is defineitly a diffrent outlook on Naruto-Akatsuki fics keep up the excellent work.
| narureye chapter 3 . 8/31/2008
Wow, Great Story, Very Unique!
I like the fact that you are not using the same lame cliches people use all the time.
I like where the story is heading BUT, I HOPE that Naruto being a member of a criminal organization does not become the happy go lucky idiot, who's always smiling and being loud.
| DarkTorrent chapter 3 . 8/31/2008
I find it hard to criticize this story whether because of exceptional writting or my love for Pein and Akatsuki Naruto stories, I do not know, a mixture of both I guess...
Regardless... I liked the way you handled the explanations and the beginning of Naruto's training, especially the obvious hint that Pein will demand from Naruto to develop his own unique shinobi style, this is quite refreshing in contrast of dozens Naruto stories where he learns dozen upon dozen tehniques and flaunks them left and right, the weight training solution was also very good... The only thing that I think could have been added to those explanations is that every punch or thrust, move in taijutsu; every usage of ninjutsu and genjutsu needs to have a purpose, whether it is to get the opponent to lower his guard, corner him or disable him... a shinobi fight is like a game, with ninja arts as tools to gain victory.
| The Reborn Akatsuki chapter 2 . 8/30/2008
good story hope to read more its very intresting to see how naruto will turn out in this fan fic any way good job
| Lanya89 chapter 2 . 8/25/2008
Great! I can't wait for the next chapter!
| Lanya89 chapter 1 . 8/25/2008
I luv this chapter! I'm wondering what will happen...
| daprodigalson chapter 1 . 8/18/2008
Brilliant start, it's been a while since I've come across a fic as good and promising as this.
I am looking forward to your next update, and how Pein will react to having the Kyuubi Jinchuuriki in rain during a civil war and the problems it may cause with the leader in the shadows of akatsuki.
anyways, looking forward to your next update. Good job, keep it up!
| narureye chapter 2 . 8/17/2008
Very original story line , i hope for more !
| DarkTorrent chapter 2 . 8/16/2008
Well, this chapter was quite unexpected... I thought that most of this chapter would take the meeting between Naruto and Pein, but you suprised me yet again. And I find this suprise quite welcomed, I like both the detailed description of events and the start of Naruto's character and psyhological background development in this chapter, it is not perfect (what is?:) ) but still, the deepness that you try to potray your characters with is nothing but admirable.
| Zarcade chapter 2 . 8/16/2008
Good. Like the plot (so far) the character depictions, the situations Naruto is shown by Konan, more or less the whole story. Good job
| mute thunder chapter 2 . 8/16/2008
I like the story so far, you've been doing a good job in potraying Naruto and Konan. IMO it'll continue to be a good untill you make some major things that don't really get explained, that includes:
Naruto suddenly wanting to be a hokage again, you said that Naruto's animosity of the villagers would likely be forgotten when he returns and so would likely his 'love' for the Village. saying 'love' like that since other writers doesn't seem to get that Naruto's obsession of becoming a Hokage is to get respect and protect his 'precious people' (I'm way beyond tired of that line now, especially when it's shouted out in nearly every chapter in most stories). Naruto is sure to earn some respect in Rain Country and will have other people to protect, like Konan. So unless he befriends every damned ninja in Konoha( which has happened in a few stories were Naruto is a ninja for another village, how many foreign ninja makes friends in other villages, not many I would guess), that's not gonna hapen IMO. Of course that depends on how you write the story, and if you do go that way, make sure to do it in a good way.