The Madara part irked me because it’s obito and his fathers name is Tajima... also they would never recruit Senju they would kill them for sure. Sorry, other than that part looking good

wow this is some ... can i even call this a story? your ideas are crap

u were made to make lemons

Eh 0-100 in the style of obvious troupes around this uh genre. Lmao

Interesting and well-written story.

All thing considered, this was a very good story and I'm looking forward to the sequel! 7/10 from me

Wow, this was written before a LOT of stuff was revealed in universe, huh? The story is pretty well written either way, it's just a little surprising because I don't read many fics this old.

What an unrelenting asshole. Why can nobody write a Jiraiya that isn't just a... disappointment?

Rest of the story was pretty good. Paint-by-numbers, but that has it's own appeal.

it was always kakashi's fault in whatever happens on wave arc. if he didnt act like a shitty bastard and already started taking care of zabuza at the start they wouldnt have problems. but no, he is lazy as fuck and a fucking hypocrite for saying his comrade trash rules when he is the one who is leading them to the slaughterhouse. I always hated kakashi's character.

isn't the five tails a horse-whale hybrid? u stated in chap 5 that kokuo's a friggin wolf.

the entire karin scene feels like one giant deus ex machina

yeah sakura in root it seems. yeah I'm gona jus nope my self out of this fic before i read another sentence. thanks for the effort and all the best with this fic

I like the story, but the pace is a bit too slow at the moment, mostly due to the large amounts of explanitory text.

Another thing i think you should consider is that the avarage person does not lnow what a hakama is. The vast remainder does not imagine the ninja style pans when you say that, but instead the pants one sees kendoka use, which are very wide and not ninjs like at all.

Why did Itachi didn't get a normal eye transplanted? That's better than nothing.

good opener