nice fic! I just read "the time paradox" yesterday

Gulp. That isn't good. . . . . . . .

This continues to be as good as your first chapter. The technical detail was most impressive as was the baker analogy. The humour is there too, I loved the Alice references and ‘but shifting timelines was not part of my training.’

However, I think you need to be careful not to make your style too florid; ‘Her eyes averted downward and she bit her lower lip as she recalled that particular meeting with the young Master Fowl,’ would, I think, read better as ‘She looked at the floor and bit her lower lip.’ Similarly orbs are better left as part of the British Crown Jewels; ‘Artemis seemed to somehow be able to meet Holly’s eyes. It was a calculating look, as if thoughts were racing at bullet-like speeds behind hazel and azure orbs’ would flow better as ‘Artemis seemed to somehow meet Holly’s gaze. It was a calculating look, as if thoughts were racing at bullet-like speeds behind hazel and azure eyes.’

I hope you don’t think I’m being too critical but your style is generally good and close to Colfer’s own so it seems a shame to over-embellish it. By the way it’s Cudgeon, not Cudgen.

Thank you for such an entertaining update.

Ah, so the change isn't Koboi's absence. This chapter was quite well done, I thought.

A few questions, though: Why are fairies disappearing, and why some earlier than others? Why just sentient species? Why not animals, plants or inanimate objects? Or will those come later? It doesn't seem to make sense.

Cool! Nice cliffie ending, although some more description would be nice. Still, it's looking good so far...

nice chapter and a good start to a good looking story, i just wanted to know what the pairing are going to be, it effects if i read the story..sorry. Just tell me what pairings you plan.

great story so far update ASAP

OMG! IF I DIDN'T KNOW ANY BETTER, I WOULD THINK YOU WERE EOIN COLFER! THAT IS SUCH A GOOD BEGINNING! I LOVE YOU! KEEP ON WRITING! I'LL BE WAITING! UPDATE SOON! OR I'LL DIE OF ANTICIPATION! DEFINATELY A FAVOURITE! LOVE IT!

Oh this is getting good! And i would also like to say that your writing skills are similar to Eoin's and that even this early in the story, have kept the characters' personality like it should be. I can't wait for the update! :D

It seems like something Colfer could have written. Good plot, quite funny. Might need a little bit of editing, but I didn't spot any major problems.

So- what's the new timeline? I'm guessing since Koboi came to the future, she'll be absent from the past. Without her funding, Cudgeon won't be able to pull off his coup in the Arctic Incident... since the People don't need Fowl's help to figure out what the B'wa Kell are doing, he probably can't rescue his father... which means the Fowls will continue their criminal enterprises... no friendship developed during the Arctic Incident means Holly refuses to heal Butler... which means he dies from Blunt's bullet... without fairy aid in the heist, Spiro keeps the C Cube... Is that how the People are discovered? Spiro pings them with the Cube? Anyway, this seems to have a lot of potential, and I can't wait to find out what the new world is like!

wow. Okay, by romance, what shipper do you mean? I mean, I'm going to read it anyway, I was just curious. . .

A very nice start to what will probably be a good and interesting fanfic

oh&also, the only reason i'm sending an anonymous review is b/c I'm actually too lazyto log in. my account is kirackerjack.

I wanna see what's next. :o

This is awesome. The plots good, grammar and spelling solid, and your characters are actually... in character! (I know shocking, isn't it?) Over all I'd give it a eight point six so far on a scale from 1-10 but it starts and three and there's no nine. ;)Anyways, good job and UPDATE soon.

Rawk On

JJohnz

Dude, I feel like crying or hugging you or something! Finally someome has written a more than decent AF fanfic! It has a witty plot and you (unlike may in this fandom) show that you actually care about spelling and grammar! It is written in a way that exactly reminds me of Colfer's writing so major brownie points on that! But I do have one question: is this going to be A/H (that would be so totally awesome but i would still read it if it wasn't)? I absolutly cannot wait until the next chapter! D

What a wonderful beginning! A complex and credible plot and wonderful description; 'a knife slashing clean through his lovely funding', 'it was a warped demon thing- subtlety was never their forte' could have been written by Colfer. The characterisation was also spot on, especially Qweffor's loquaciousness, and the whole thing was well written. Thank you!