|Reviews for An Unexpected Occupant|
| SML chapter 3 . 1/9/2011
Rukia's zanpocto IS white.
| MaesLawliet chapter 4 . 9/16/2009
| xwhitemoonx chapter 3 . 6/9/2009
a sequal would be awsome!
| oooooo chapter 3 . 6/9/2009
PLEASE UPDAATTE SON THIS IS SO GOOD SOO HURRY WITH THE PDATE PLEASE. D D D D
| zero-serenity chapter 3 . 2/20/2009
| Hekka chapter 1 . 1/30/2009
And continuation will be?
| tonraq chapter 3 . 12/29/2008
I like the idea behind this - it's interesting to see all the different ways people get Rukia into Ichigo's inner world to meet the Hollow.
I enjoyed the story, but I think it could benefit from some formatting - some of the paragraphs are a bit blocky, and the dialogue gets a little confusing when it all is on the same line. It also causes the capitalized words to come across like a slap in the face, so to speak :P
As well, with scene changes, I think you're a competent enough writer to scrap the headings (ie: The Next Day) and just put in a couple sentences setting the scene. As in, "The next day, as Rukia was brushing her teeth, getting ready for bed...". Makes for easier reading :)
In any case, nice cliffhanger ending. I presume there is a sequel in the works?
| SpazztasticFanGirl chapter 3 . 12/24/2008
Oh... My... God...
THIS IS SO TOTALLY COOL! TOTALLY AWSOME!
This should have so happened in the series!
OMG, YUSH! HOLLOW RUKIA! X3 You should have like a sequel where Rukia has to deal with HER hollow picking up right after THIS story! X33 That would be SO COOL!
LOL, anyways Awsome story!
BTW, MERRY CHRISTMAS AND A HAPPY NEW YEAR!
| Alucard's Annoying Friend chapter 2 . 12/23/2008
I love hichi! i actuly call him shiro!
ep! i wuv him! ep
i wish i put him on m x-mas list *wink wink* llol
| SpazztasticFanGirl chapter 2 . 11/1/2008
This is SO AWSOME! PLEASE UPDATE THIS ASAP!
| could107 chapter 2 . 10/28/2008
This is great man. Keep it comin.
| Tri-Emperor of The Twilight chapter 2 . 10/11/2008
HIchigo is awesome.
| Sephy-Chan chapter 2 . 10/7/2008
Ohh, I like where this is going
Please update soon
| Beyond Flight chapter 2 . 10/4/2008
Yay, another Shirosaki story :)
| Nephelae chapter 2 . 9/28/2008
OMG AWESOME! CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT ONE! UPDATE SOON!