|Reviews for Green Eyes|
| Rama Olendris chapter 1 . 8/11/2008
Hmm... brotherly love much?
Anyway, wonderful descriptions and ability to tell readers exactly the thoughts of these characters. You have talent, I hope you'll continue to write and develop more skills with time. Just keep it up!
I would suggest this to make your fic a little better. Make it a little longer because now it's a 'fic-let' and many readers like to read things that are a little longer. (It's still very sweet, and you did a good job). Also, this is just a personal thing- you used the word koibito a little too often. Mix up the wording a little more.
| kage.exe chapter 1 . 8/10/2008
aw that is so sweet... great job hikari...or should I call aki now?
| Firehedgehog chapter 1 . 8/10/2008
purrs.. very nice
but *glares* its not warped
| CrazedNarutoFan chapter 1 . 8/9/2008
This work is so beautiful. I really enjoyed reading it. Excellent job.