Reviews for Last Chance
baronesspotter chapter 25 . 4/6/2015
Fantastic chapter! :)
Grey Noise chapter 25 . 4/6/2015
I don't remember subscribing to this story, and I had to go back a few chapters for context.

A few comments on your latest chapter: The progression of events in this chapter are rather jumbled, especially because your lack of line breaks make scene changes hard to distinguish. Please put in some sort of indication for the scene changes. This was especially notable in the italicized section near the beginning, which leaves hanging the thread of Albus telling Horus the story, and ends with a paragraph about Dippet that's unrelated to the paragraphs on either side.

Also, a grammar nitpick: you forgot the apostrophes in possessive nouns consistently in this chapter. Most places you wrote "Alistors" should be "Alistor's", and same for a few other names.

I hope this unsolicited critique has been helpful.
Blueowl chapter 25 . 4/6/2015
Yay, and update _
Glad to see Alastor is a real friend and is helping Tom.
Hope to see more soon (and action! :P)
littlemsstrawberry chapter 25 . 4/6/2015
Finally! I've been waiting ages for this! Love this story so so very much
Krysania chapter 25 . 4/6/2015
I'm glad you updated even that little bit:DDDD
graynavarre chapter 25 . 4/6/2015
I am glad to see more of this and now i get to reread it to refresh my memory
LauralHill chapter 25 . 4/6/2015
Hooray update!
Anon chapter 15 . 4/4/2015
This is (not related to the story) a common but irritating mistake: GANDHI not Ghandi. Please don't butcher his name.

Also, when will you update again, if at all?
dancesontrains chapter 24 . 3/21/2015
This was enjoyable! Fatherhood to someone like Tom is a difficult thing.
yngoldfogee chapter 24 . 3/10/2015
I've really enjoyed reading this and hope you can see your way to giving us another update in the coming months.
tricorvus chapter 24 . 2/12/2015
This is great! Is there a sequel?
tricorvus chapter 19 . 2/12/2015
This is fantastic stuff!
Rock on
Shattermirror chapter 22 . 2/12/2015
I am... impressed. (Pomona Sprout is my new role model.)
tricorvus chapter 12 . 2/11/2015
Love it more the more I read
Rock on
tricorvus chapter 11 . 2/11/2015
I'm adopted myself (18 months old), so naturally this made me weep
Rock on
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