|Reviews for A Fragment of Substance|
| Blue-Inked Frost chapter 109 . 2/12
It's wonderful to see another chapter of this, as always. :D I like the changes in the plot. Finn's difficulties with his nature are fascinating and engaging as he faces his troubles with the Flaming Fist. Anna-hallucinations in his head to go along with Bhaal-hallucinations are very interesting! I also enjoyed the depth that the minor characters had here, especially the guards.
It takes a lot of gall for Finn to call Suzy tarnished brass after accidentally impregnating her and sheltering with her from a murder rap! I hope he didn't accidentally kill anyone else.
Luedre's actions in this chapter were also most intriguing!
| sunnysoul chapter 109 . 2/11
Ohmygosh I've been reading your story for YEARS and was absolutely gutted when you stopped updating.
So glad you're back!
I really enjoyed Anna's POV and am sad that this has changed, but I'm also kinda excited that we'll now know Finn's perspective moving forward.
In this chapter I liked the thoughts on Finn's friendship with Kivan. I love the way Kivan is explored in your story. And Xan. Especially Xan. Lord Xan and Luedre. Did I mention Xan?
| Kulyok chapter 109 . 2/10
Yay! It happened! :) So good to see you again, I hope you are well! I'll be the first to admit that Finn's and Anna's tortured walkabouts at Candlekeep can be a pain to emphasize with at times(cold, suffering, and all that Bhaal jazz sure make you miss old good dinners at Beregost! :)), but I'm so glad to read more anyway! And the Chapter 7 transition is in sight! And Finn's viewpoint! I rather felt "Ha, yes, he deserves it!" with the forced-feeding scene and Suzy's scene(Finn was, alas, rather a realistic petulant boy there). Ah, Finn, you've made rather a mess of things, haven't you? But Luedre-Finn scene was very powerful, very much to my liking, and, yes, I liked it every time Xan's name was dropped, guilty as charged. I could sympathize with both of them, and now I'm rather interested to see what the others will do. (Kivan's small exposition rocked - yes, he's solid, dependable and a friend, but at times you forget how harsh and cold he can be with killing). And my special thanks for such a long update!
| Thimble chapter 109 . 2/10
| Blue-Inked Frost chapter 108 . 7/18/2013
Goodness, more scary doppelgangers being scary; that scene with not-Kivan and Anna was chilling. But Tethtoril appearing at the end makes things start to sort themselves out. I liked that Finn's ancestry is now out in the open! It feels like the plot's starting to really move forward. I also liked reading about Anna's bravery in protecting Luedre. The consequences from Finn's relationship with the Flaming Fist and his desertion also add a very interesting twist to your story.
As always, excellent to read more of this!
| Thimble chapter 108 . 7/17/2013
Gosh - that was an exciting chapter.
Yay for Tethtoril!
| Kulyok chapter 108 . 7/17/2013
Wow, intrigue! I immediately went to google this Stone of Silence. Couldn't find it in Forgotten Realms, but I'm guessing it's something interesting.
I took it that false Kivanna was the last doppelganger in the Keep, right? (And Kivanna's body dissolved, so it couldn't be shown to the guards?) I wonder why Tethoril wanted to get Finn out of the keep as soon as possible, but I guess we'll find out!
And Chapter 7 will begin in full force now that everyone's out of Candlekeep. Well, except for Finn, who's going to get out in chains. These blackouts are seriously BAD. Almost killing Anna, Luerdre, and maybe killed those three unnamed people. Reminded me an old anecdote paraphrased from Chekov's "Three Sisters": "Have you heard?" - "What?" - "Baron and Solyony have just exchanged shotsl" - "Oh my God, what happened?" - "Ah, killed two passers-by." - "Thank God, everyone's alive!"
Thank you for the chapter. Enjoyed! Anna's confrontation with Kivanna and protecting Luerdre was powerful, and I liked Xan's little details, like bleeding nose or his shivering frame when he retreated from the blade.
| Blue-Inked Frost chapter 107 . 6/26/2013
Great to see this back! I enjoyed this version of the escape from Candlekeep - the characters using their ingenuity to think up various plans for escape. Imoen's resourcefulness was good! I also liked the way you ended that chapter, leaving it open whether Finn or the doppelgangers or Sarevok or someone else entirely was the killer.
Suzy may just be right about Finn - especially with his Bhaalspawn issues to contend with. I am looking forward to reading what's coming next!
| Kulyok chapter 107 . 6/26/2013
Yay, a new chapter! Not a decade too soon! Ahem, I meant, it's a great surprise, and I would like a second helping, please. :) But no drops from that little blue vial!
Detective-wise I'm blissfully clueless, so I'm eagerly waiting to find out who's behind these attacks, be it Flint, Imoen, Sarevok or someone else. Xan seems to know, but thankfully he keeps his mouth shut. (Loved the slap scene a lot, by the way). I just hope the killer won't hurt Kivan or Jaheira(though, truth be told, I don't mind if it's Luerdre).
I liked Suzy's scene the best. Both her decision to set the boy on her grandfather's path and her fierce "I always love a tall tale!" It has become pretty clear to me she won't need Finn or Anna, ever. Maybe her kid's childhood won't be ideal, but it will be a good life.
Aaand the clever captain! The guy who wouldn't take uncorked wine! Wouldn't even wait for the buns! Wouldn't touch the stew(pity about the food)! I really felt Imoen's disappointment. Though I was relieved: I feared Anna and Finn and Imoen would just disappear into the night, leaving the others behind, and I've kind of gotten fond of them, Xan especially.
Thank you for coming back.
| Kulyok chapter 106 . 9/7/2012
I had a great time reading this, as always. Your chapters are like long evenings near the fire - and lately, each contains several stories in itself. Thank you!
I liked Imoen's reaction/misunderstanding to Anna's illness - it felt very natural, and her reaction about the baby, too. Gods, I can't imagine how hard it would hit the girl when she finds out the truth. Although I was a bit surprised the girl knew her fish plates and soup spoons, when Anna, minor nobility, didn't, but Immy does have her hidden depths. (Btw, missed more food in this chapter. Your descriptions of food ares superb. :)
Ulraunt was totally in his element. Me being an Ulraunt sympathizer, I needed that cold shower of Finn rightfully accusing Ulraunt of torture. Their scene was very powerful. I certainly didn't expect Ulraunt's murder and was - delighted? no, wrong word - totally immersed? - in the detective story that went after. With clues and suspects and Xan(yay!) and Finn in irons, and a susceptible Flaming Fist captain, and with doppelgangers gone - gone? - I'm loving this. And you left us hanging, you cruel person, you! Naturally, Parda is whom I'd suspect first, although Finn's blackouts are disturbing, too.
I liked Anna's reactions to Finn in this and previous chapter - it's real, truthful, adds drama(and angst!), and of course, that's what she *would* feel, however much she loves him. I would wish someone would hug her - both Jaheira and Xan care, but they're just too businesslike here, and for a good reason; and Immy is wrapped in her own loss. And there's the unborn baby, too - ouch.
Speaking of Jaheira, I loved the awkward story of her and Khalid stranded in the snow. And another thing from that part of the chapter: Anna's "Make it stop" was very powerful. But maybe because I played Mass Effect 2's Overlord(it has its own "Quiet, please - make it stop!").
The scene with clapping Anna in irons and Finn/Xan lying on her behalf - I liked that a lot. But you knew that, didn't you? And, speaking of Xan, I liked that he didn't read the letter. I also suspected that he was a shadow behind the door in Ulraunt's office that Anna saw, but that probably was one of the murderers, wasn't it?
I was intrigued about how much Xan knew - with his suspicions and his soft "Child. Children" near the fire, I thought he already knew about Finn, but it is clear he did not. What and whom did he suspect, then, I wonder? Sarevok? And how would he explain Finn's "oddities" to himself, then, if he did not think of Finn as a possible Child of Bhaal - why would he ask Anna over and over again if Finn is guilty and if she feels fear, if it's not about Finn being the Child? With Anna running away after Xan, I'm obviously intrigued, especially, since he seemed rather angry with her and threw off her arm in disgust, he probably thinks she's been concealing the truth for a long time, and not just learnt it.
Thank you for uploading, again. Hope you're okay - these dark passages must be emotionally draining to explore!
| Alice chapter 106 . 8/27/2012
Aaaah, god, just update the next chapter now :D I can't take the suspense each time I finish one of your chapter :D This is amazing as always !
| Bifflechips chapter 106 . 8/20/2012
Ahh, the plot thickens... again. :) Another nice lengthy chapter, and I can't say that I foresaw Ulraunt's passing. Though I still want to see this subplot wrap itself up soon. I'm curious as to how far back you planned some of the events of this story, seeing as this one has been going for a few years now. And I must say, I do quite enjoy seeing the power of Bhaal's taint not just in Finn, which has probably caused the smirks of your readers in previous chapters while your characters had no idea, but it's also great to see what real terror and fear the revelation causes. Great work, again.
| Blue-Inked Frost chapter 106 . 8/20/2012
Excellent! Always great to see another chapter. :D I liked the dramatic consequences to Anna and Finn's impulsive flight into the cold! That story about Ondyar seemed creepy, the part of the chapter that made the most impression on me. The Ulraunt murder is a bit of a mystery, and there are not too many suspects! I liked Xan's forensics, and Finn and Xan working together to save Anna from arrest too. Good chapter.
| Kulyok chapter 105 . 6/28/2012
Finally, the revelation! Loved the resolution of a Baldurian stand-off with two Finns, Xan and a song(never watched the Red Dwarf, so I can't compare, but I loved how logical it was). Damn, no "whole" Xan till the very end? Grrr, Luedre, grrr! I'm about to make cat's eyes from Shrek 2, so you'd heal him faster. :) (Or, better yet, from Shrek Forever).
Never thought I'd feel so sorry for Imoen, but here it was. :( Come to think of it, the entire Candlekeep is like one big ruin. Like Winterfell out of Martin's "Song of Ice and Fire" in later volumes - abandoned, its treasures ripe for the taking, corpses everywhere and winter, winter, winter. Loved the atmosphere. Finn-Anna chase fit perfectly, though, as a Russian, I wonder how on earth none of them got severe frostbite(because I totally would, at these temperatures and running and lying in the snow).
Also, liked the little detail with Kivan and tracing Ulraunt's steps. The detail with Gorion's letter that was triggered by Finn's touch was thoughtful, too, but "I don't see any dust; how does he do this?" blew me away for some reason. :))) Great (and long, mmm!) chapter.
| Bifflechips chapter 105 . 6/26/2012
Well, that was a hell of a chapter, and it gladdens me to get to the revelation. As a note, I have not seen Red Dwarf, but heard great things. I just started watching Doctor Who though and I can't get enough of it.
Now for the rest of the review. I just realized how long it had been since I read any chapters from you, and I wasn't used to how long the chapters were. But I'm glad it was. These were wonderfully intense chapters and the two Finns problem solution gave me a huge smile across my face. I could just picture Xan's criticism of Finn perfectly.
Finn spitballing the idea that he and Sarevok were related as a joke also produced a smile.
Also, I'll always lament that there was never a Luedre mod for this game. She feels so naturally a part of this story that I really want her to be in the game when I've picked up Xan every time (though I gave the Kivan romance in BG2 a shot and that was one of the best ones I've ever played).
As expected, you built up the dopplegangers' last stand in Candlekeep very well, and I was suspicious with everyone the party came across, be it Hull or Firebead or even Ulraunt.
And now I look forward to seeing the revelation played out in the next scene. Write on, my dear!