Reviews for Iceman's Fall
Saggit chapter 1 . 11/9/2001
This reads like a succession fo dialogs, without much in the way of internal conflict or development. As the idea behind the story seems to be the maturing of Iceman, one would expect more concentration on Iceman's POV; instead, we get his words to friends. There's little sign, too, of any specific personality among the story's people as they speak, and no descriptions of gestures, clothes, precious little that would further increase this individuality. Well-formatted, good grammar and basic vocabulary, but I don't get a sense of progression, and none of the tension that comes from a person who goes through conflict to come out stronger on the other side.
Star chapter 4 . 11/9/2001
Wow, I love your story. You have a great story line here. I have always believed that 'Robert' was a stronger character than others saw. I can't wait for the next chapter.