|Reviews for Loch Ness Monster|
| Rosalind2013 chapter 12 . 1/4
I really liked this! It was fluffy and cute, and your writing was pretty good!
I did notice some verb tense issues, but they were so sporadic that it didn't really detract from your story all that much. Just keep an eye on it!
I liked Nessie's personality in your story! Seems more like an actual character, and less like you just threw yourself into the story and added her name to it.
It seems that an uncanny number of Renesmee fics do that. Ick.
Your OC's were good too! None of them were too prominent, and they all fit in so seamlessly! None were Mary-Sues either!
Also, kudos for your characterization of Jacob. He was perfect! :)
All in all, it was a good story, and I liked it very much!
| zvc56 chapter 1 . 6/26/2013
I like it better when Jacob calls her Nessie but other than that it's a very good start!
| findingmymuse chapter 12 . 6/3/2011
This was really good. I read it awhile ago, but reread it cuz it stuck in my mind. You rock :)
| whosurdaddy chapter 12 . 4/1/2010
Aww that was a really good story!
| Emma chapter 12 . 11/27/2009
WOW! thats all i can say, well actually i can say a lot of things, but wow seems appropriate. i know this is massively out of date and all, but oh well. Your story was so awesome! i haven't read a fic that good in ages, and i read a lot. I love that you write using the same words, and phrases as in the books, and how you make constant referance to them. It's so clever.
your writng is brilliant, i loved the plot with nessie not being able to touch people, and i loved how you delved into that, and what it would really mean. the chapter about Charlie made e cry like a baby. which is totally pathetic, it was so well sritten, it was like Is my grandpa dying?
i love that you mentioned all the other characters, Justin reminded me of a Mike a bit, weather that was your intention i'm not entirely sure, but thats how i saw it.
RANDOM POINT-LOVE THE CHAPTER NAME THING, "JUST LIKE HER MOTHER" PURE GENIUS.
thankyou so muhc for the time i go to spend reading this, i'll be telling all my friends to read it too. so brilliant, i can't wait to check out your other stuff. please keep up the good work! hugs Emma
| Sam the Ant Ha chapter 12 . 10/25/2009
I loved it!
| allabouthp2 chapter 12 . 10/19/2009
I liked it. Definately worth reading for any Jake/Nessie shippers out there.
| We are human chapter 12 . 9/15/2009
Wow, even though this story was sort of short, I really enjoyed it. I really liked how you portrayed the characters and their relationships. Well done.
| We are human chapter 7 . 9/15/2009
It's too bad even a lot of romantic relationships in our society don't have the depth and trust that Jacob has for Renesmee. It's like were all using each other for fickle fun.
| Maddy Love Castiel chapter 12 . 8/22/2009
Awwh that was REALLY cute! Ur a great writer!
| blob chapter 2 . 7/18/2009
i dont like the amazonian guy it has nvr, is nvr, eill nvr be ment to be! nessie and jacob shoukd be togher... and jacob calls her nessie in breaking dawn not carlie btw.
| laurazuleta18 chapter 12 . 2/19/2009
Great Story! Really good! D
| Ginnya chapter 12 . 1/21/2009
That's a lovely story I LIKE IT.
| forgotmypassword chapter 11 . 1/1/2009
I know i'm a chapter ahead but on # 10 I really really liked Nessie's thoughts about her changing who Jacob really was, and the clip metaphor thing. That was brilliant :) never heard it before, it's great to read something completely new
thanks for the edward-bella part. I love those two and i missed them
| tigress33 chapter 12 . 12/8/2008
Kudos on this story. I've been reading a lot of Jacob/Nessie fics lately and yours is by far one of the best ones. I think the reason is because your Nessie is a sensitive, precocious and realistic teenager trying to figure things out. I liked that Jacob was lighthearted too. I do think he would have reacted to the Justin-taking-Nessie-to-prom thing with a little more passion, but that's just an opinion. Congrats on a nice story!