|Reviews for I wasn't expecting this|
| DnMikado chapter 11 . 6/6/2016
It was a great story really intresting a little bit rushed. Sasuke and Naruto could have goten to know eachother a little bit more. Loved Narutos half brothers xD
I kind of wonder how the demons know if their partner ever cheated on eachother if their babies can become an other demon then the type they are? O.o
When Narutos and his sisters babies (the once you described, looking like Itach/Sasuke) was wolf demons, kind of feelt like if they were to have been demons then they would have been wolf demons xD
| Evangeline039 chapter 11 . 7/22/2015
Nice story! I love it!
| Chandra Migina chapter 11 . 7/28/2014
Great story - really enjoyed reading it.
And perfect, but scary epilogue xD
| Umbra Drachen chapter 2 . 5/26/2013
by the way it is cousin not cosine
| vampsweets chapter 3 . 12/1/2012
love your story! 3
and about the spelling you asked about in the beginning it is Yukata
| Hatake Sakura Love chapter 4 . 11/14/2012
your story isn't bad. I like it however, you do have a few spelling mistakes here and there and you tend to jump from one thing to another rather quickly. I suggest slowing it down a little go back and do some more editing and perhaps add a bit more detail. What this seems to be to me is like a rough draft or planning stage. Really go back and add more. give it a better flow, ne? on and two chapters back you said Onii-san when referring to Katherine, it should be Onee-san. onii is brother
| Kira Lil'Pedro chapter 6 . 12/30/2011
| FemaleKyuubi666 chapter 2 . 6/30/2011
a lot of spelling mistakes, but if u want i can help with those. overall, good story! XD
| Care-free kitten chapter 2 . 5/7/2009
hey don't worry about spelling because i can tell what you mean k? :)
| Kawaiimiachan chapter 10 . 5/1/2009
if he is a man i wonder how he had his children..
| MarthaM chapter 1 . 3/9/2009
okay, who in their right mind would keep slave demon foxes as their gardeners? thats just ridiculous.
| Alex chapter 2 . 2/27/2009
so far so good
but I think u could benefit from a beta
ohh and its yukata not yuketa
| Kasumi725 chapter 10 . 10/19/2008
why are the names different in chapter 10 than in ch. 9?
| Kasumi725 chapter 5 . 10/18/2008
You have a lot of spelling errors:
and many more grammatical errors
some of the Japanese is also used incorrectly:
onee-san means older sister, while onii-san means older brother...you used onii-san in the context of the racoon calling his older sister "onii-san", which is wrong
I highly advise you to get a beta to check out your work and help to get it grammatically correct, as well as for helping you to use the correct Japanese phrases.
overall though, the story is good so far. just keep in mind, some people get turned off by a story immediately if they see mistakes in spelling, grammar and misuse of the right Japanese terminology.
| NostalgicDaydream chapter 2 . 9/27/2008
The ending was just out there! Not bad out there, but humorous. "I'm gonna have sex with you." That's just funny imagining it coming from Sasuke. The grammar is a little bad, but not anything that is annoying. Good job!