|Reviews for All Sorts of Bad timing|
| Jaguarin chapter 4 . 8/20/2008
Had you try to write 4 or 5 pages and post it? Read just 2 or 3 paragraphs dont help to keep the readers attention to your fic. Is like read in one chapter: "Today is sunday" and in the next chapter "And it's sunny" and in the third "I like it."
Just a suggestion.
| gryffon47 chapter 4 . 8/17/2008
It's good but it's hard to understand. skip lines or something.