|Reviews for Autophobic|
| Arbitually chapter 1 . 7/11
| Starry's Light chapter 1 . 5/1
this entire oneshot kept tossing and tossing my emotions around and now I am seriously not okay
That last sentence... I... I... -covers face-
Oh my gosh... oh my gosh... oh my gosh...
I-I can pretend that this didn't happen or something can't I... I can pretend he had a twin brother and - no that doesn't solve anything... I can... pretend that... that EVIL HYPNO FROM SOME OTHER POKEMON THING WAS DISGUISED AS HIM AND... I'm getting so desperate over a years-old story oh my gosh TT_TT
But I'm... But I'm... but what if I'm seriously not okay now? ;w;
That was such a sad ending - and the way you portrayed it just ripped my heart out of my chest.
But at the same time it was this ironic twist from the charmander to his trainer...
And while I was freaking out at the turning point when the charmander decided he couldn't stay (I mean, I could see his point of view, but my personal thoughts on this overwhelmed me, ahahaha... if it was me I'd be heartbroken, right? Sobbing all over... I feel like I'd end up saying something... would -not- bear the thought of just... leaving... I'm so clingy oh my gosh wahhh) again, like, I could get where he was coming from, but I wish he'd stay...
and then his trainer...
(I also really like how you portrayed the trainer, even if that came from the other oneshot before this one - just how the trainer is "you" (well, them) and it's not needed to fill them out or anything...)
The Pikachu was a nice touch to round out the character cast...
Can I say quickly that I honestly was crying when the charmander became the charizard and flew -and- at that sad ending? Oh my gosh... oh my gosh TT_TT
There's a few specific word choices you made around the place that I really liked... I'm not sure if this is your writing style for all your stories, but even if it is, my goodness, I love it! This story is a little simple at times in the way it's written, but it gets the point across easily and there were moments I was just choked up (like with the charizard - and that was precious how his trainer gave him the mints.. xD) where you add details in these really nice places...
Excuse me while I get a little literature-crazy, but at the beginning you were using a sort of anaphora with "I felt" and the chorus of beeping and it made me happy when I saw it...
How immediately after he's waking, besides the beeping. It's just a probing of "I felt"s in there... I really loved that...
and the way you continuously brought up the charmander's dilemma throughout the story, how he tried to commit suicide because of his fear, fear of his trainer and fear of what he knew was coming... all these little things that set him off... and even as he began to realize there was still love there, his trainer shut him down... said he should go... (how you phrased that as well made me want to cry) and then you give me this -hope-! That oh, he's changing for the better! It's beautiful! He'll be reunited! (I was scared this was gonna happen, or something similar, AND IT DID ;W;) because no, his trainer died just days after charizard was gone...
that's awful... oh my gosh...
It's awful when... his loved one's - the trainer's - wasn't even enough to help him... oh my gosh, that was... awful...
(just to clarify, your writing was stellar; the outcome in the plot was awful... well to me. I'm heartbroken now. I'm still on the verge of tears again ahhh)
Ah, what else - the "Splash!" I loved how you kept bringing that in...
When I think about it now, it's almost as if, in a creepy way, it was foreshadowing (well, a lot of the beginning was) to the end... Again, like I said, that contrast... it was beautiful and it killed me ;n;
Eheh, sorry, I'm gushing over something you wrote a long time ago.
I know when I read my old writing I usually can't stand it... xD
oh gosh. If this is something you wrote eight years ago, I fear my mental state after reading something recent. ;w;
Maybe it won't even be something like this, but... but still... oh my gosh...
I know that writers only get better the more they write, and you had all of those write tips accompanying your allocation of stories... Oh geez, I want to read your new stuff but I'm scared I'll be wrecked by the feeling and the beauty of it...
But that's not a reason not to read on...
I'll probably come back to your profile (er, at some point... There's this 300k story I found and I want to read it... need to read it.. somehow eventually... I need a schedule, haha...)
But I really need to come back to your writing some point (soon?) I'll try my best... I seriously need to read more of your writing oh my goshhh, heh...
Umm... thank you for writing this.
It was very beautiful... although the outcome for the trainer was unfortunate... you captured the emotions well and my heart is crying, eheh... So um, thank you
| TheVictoriousMC chapter 1 . 12/26/2015
oh no :,(
| AGH chapter 1 . 12/22/2015
YOU MADE ME FEEL HAPPY AND THEN HORRIBLE
AND YOU DID IT 8 YEARS INTO THE FUTURE TOO
I APPLAUD YOU
*SLOW, DETERMINED CLAP*
| Snivine444 chapter 1 . 12/6/2015
NO. HE DID NOT DIE.
NO. THE TRAINER IS ALIVE.
NO. THEY GET TOGETHER AGAIN.
NO. THEY FLY TOGETHER AND LIVE HAPPILY EVERY AFTER.
NO. THEY WILL.
NO. THEY MUST.
NO. THEY HAVE TO.
TELL ME THEY DID!
I DEMAND YOU!
(screams and sobs)
| FUTUREISNOW chapter 1 . 6/27/2015
YOU HAVE DECIEVED ME. I READ YOUR BIO AND IT SAID THE CHARMANDER HAS NOT DIED, AND THE WORDS HAD FOOLED ME TO BELIEVEING THIS STIRY HAD A HAPPY ENDING. (But of course it wouldn't have something as simple as that, YOU'RE the one writting after all.)
THIS IS. EVEN. SADDER AND I HAD NOT BELIEVED IT POSSIBLE.
Also, the best Pkmn oneshot/sequel I've read.
| Cycoviers chapter 1 . 5/30/2015
Wow, that's really sad for the Pokemon. If only the trainer survived.
| ThePlotBunnies chapter 1 . 5/19/2015
| KHLegacy chapter 1 . 4/27/2015
Noooooooooooo why why?
| Guest chapter 1 . 4/20/2015
that is all i have to say
| James Whitefield chapter 1 . 3/11/2015
A touching masterpiece.
| sereneskydragonslayer chapter 1 . 1/26/2015
my heart has been broken to bits and pieces...
...is there a sequel where the trainer survives his suicide? O.O I really need a sequel like that right now lol, my heart has been broken too badly cause this is the 3rd pokemoncharacter death fic I've read today so I was already mourning for like 2 other people X'D
| DAT4120 chapter 1 . 12/12/2014
:( is the ending. :) is the story
| TheFinalElements chapter 1 . 9/2/2014
That's so nice of you...
| Haru chapter 1 . 8/9/2014
I was so happy Charizard would be with his trainer...and now he's dead? Why would you do thisssssss?