|Reviews for In the Blink of an Eye|
| exiled.contessa chapter 9 . 12/9/2008
I really, really don't want to see Edward as racist. I get who he is in this story. And I get that Meyer never actually had to address this issue or this aspect of Edward one way or another. But how can he be my hero if he's racist?
He used the n-word. Ouch! I guess I won't be having my fantasy Edward after all.
Then again, the real world is - and real people are - often more painful/hurtful than we'd like to believe. As crushing as it might be to imagine, the Edwards of this world could easily pass us by because of race, disability, weight, social status, social class, age, etc.
Great in-depth view in the human (and vampire?) psyche.
| exiled.contessa chapter 8 . 12/9/2008
That chapter was DEEP! Delving into the whole Cullen family dynamic as you did. Intriguing still. And probably a very realistic analysis.
I never got to see Helen properly. I was supposed to visit, to see some impressive waterfall (Georgia is full of waterfalls) and a lake, too, I think. I stayed with family / friends in Buford, Monroe, Dacula, etc. Worked for Georgia Mountain Mental Health Care for stint as an emergency services worker, too. THAT was interesting! People there are almost as crazy as people in LA!
I can imagine the Cullens in GA. Lots of hunting options.
| exiled.contessa chapter 6 . 12/9/2008
I adore your Martha character. I daresay that living with Martha would require more than "occasional" church attendance. I'm thinking weekly...at the very least!
So...Mark's not quite a saint, eh? Bookmarked Porn. *blinks* Woohoo!
I STILL want to know what Bella would have found in that PW protected folder!
| exiled.contessa chapter 5 . 12/9/2008
Note: In this chapter you say that Bella was barely 17 the last time she saw Edward. In New Moon, he left just after her 18th birthday party; thus, she'd have been barely 18 at the time.
Jasper's sweet. And probably feeling a little guilty, too, about what happened.
Mark? Totally awesome OC! And Morehouse? Impressive.
| exiled.contessa chapter 4 . 12/9/2008
I just went giddy when Bella tells Edward to go 'distract' himself! That made me laugh more than it was probably meant to.
That was rich!
For a second there, I thought you put Edward in a Prius.
There just isn't a human male on the planet who can stalk a woman as thoroughly as Edward can. He's got unlimited wealth and never sleeps. How scary and potentially creepy is that? Ha ha! But then again don't we all kinda dream of having an Edward sorta guy obsessed with us? Hm. It sounds twisted when put that way.
So Edward and Mark were friends?
I lived in Georgia for a hot minute - some months - and I seem to remember a Dawsonville. No?
| exiled.contessa chapter 3 . 12/9/2008
Would you believe I couldn't read ANY of my stories today? Shortly after I got into the office, the office phone lines, fax, and Internet all went down, and stayed down all day. The secretary even had to use my work phone to contact corporate! So my work cell got all the incoming calls from the main offices. (I really hope they lose my number once things are fixed.)
Note: I'm am in awe of your sis! I'm humbled, too. My kids (20 girl, 15 boy)are five years apart and I still ended up exhausted some days. (Much of that was due to the husband though. *coughs* divorced *coughs* I think I might have given up...so, yeah, I'm humbled.
And what is up with Edward appearing out of nowhere like that? I guess I'll just have to keep reading to find out. ~smiles~
| SilverAngel1234 chapter 24 . 12/9/2008
aww loving it!
| Lili Psique chapter 24 . 12/9/2008
I really love this fic.
I came here last month because of a rec. Usually I don't read fics about hospitals, sickness and somethings like that. And I love happy ends. Real life is already difficult, and, well, I already force myself to read some books that are GOOD but with plots that I don't like.
But this fic is unique. You write so well, and the choices of words and the flow is just perfect. It really feels like a book, like a well written narrative, with all the worries of someone who cares about what is in the paper (or the computer, whatever). Thei relationship seems adult and real, and, well, of course I'd like to see them together, but (at least right now) it doesn't go with the plot you created.
I don't think this work will have thousands of reviews and will become a 'popfic', and that's fine. Because I'm not afraid of you ending it without worring about the plot, and I know that this won't became common sense.
Congratulations! You really rock. (And, of course, I want more!)
(And sorry if I left any mistakes... english isn't my first language... XD)
| Itz193 chapter 24 . 12/9/2008
I just discovered this story & I'm so glad that I did coz I like its depth & Edward-Bella rediscovery isn't rushed. Its bittersweet. Pls UD soon..Can't wait!
| exiled.contessa chapter 2 . 12/9/2008
This story is truly unique, and I'm indescribably pleased to have stumbled across it.
First of all, it's so realistic! It totally could have happened. Bella wouldn't be the first person paralyzed due to a cliff diving incident. And being inexperienced and alone during her dive - as she was in New Moon - it would be more likely than not that she'd get herself seriously injured. Additionally, your portrayal of her made me wonder if you are actually wheelchair bound - that's just how real it seems.
Secondly, I can't tell you how excited I am to see a person of color, besides Native Americans, included in a Twilight story. And the interracial marriage aspect is a Win in my book. As a "mature" African American female, I often consider Twilight and Twilight fan fiction stories a guilty pleasure...as many of the people I know would consider my obsession and say, "What the F...?"
In my defense, a well told love story as intense as this one defies personal background. Also, I'm very in touch with my inner teenager!
Your story is a total WIN so far - though I'm only two chapters in at the moment. I'm going to try and read more between writing reports while I'm at the office today. *giggles and winks*
| Lilia Black chapter 24 . 12/8/2008
So I finally got to catch up with this story. Still loving it, and the detail. God, I love the detail. It's not something you get in ff often. It's kind of refreshing, and makes me want to read some modern fiction, but right now I can't afford to start reading a book because once i start I can't stop, and i need to read my old novels for college, so yeah.
I like how Edward and Bella's relationship is developing, and the relationship between the Cullens I think it's the best part of it. I think it makes them more, if not human, at least more real and believable. I honestly like Twilight and ff because they're an easy read, perfect to clear my head form all the complicated, symbolic, allegoric, etc novels i read for school, but you've made both come together into THIS, which even though is not an easy read, is highly enjoyable, and I can't help but love it, like I literally feel the need to reread it to check if I didn't miss anything.
AND you have a great talent for writing. I'm usually hunting for good writers in because every time there seems to be more people who can't even spell, and for an English major, that's a little frustrating, even if what I'm looking for is an easy read, so yeah.
I know there's much more to be said, but I got a final tomorrow and have to study. I'm hoping there'll be many more chapters to comment on what hasn't been said.
| Amy J Writes chapter 24 . 12/8/2008
You get a thumbs up for this chapter just for mentioning the sweet sweetness that is LUSH! I visited my first one in London during college and I've been an addict ever since. Tragically we don't have one where I live. Ah well, I was glad to experience it vicariously through your sweetly written "girls weekend" scene. I liked all the character interactions in this chapter. I thought it was sweet how you had Alice wanting to keep Esme as her mother figure. Very in-character for her, I think!
I also enjoyed reading Edward and Bella's conversation in the car. I liked to see him stand up to her about his feelings, too. I will be interested to see when and how her returning affections for him manifest.
Thank you for your story! Looking forward to reading more soon. Good luck with finals!
| TwilightFan104 chapter 24 . 12/8/2008
What a great chapter. You gotta love Emmett and his enthusiasm. Bella always knew he thought of her as a little sister, so it was ideal for him to really get to show her in a big way that she is part of the family and her needs are important. I was impressed with how Bella handled everything once she realized they wanted her to move in. Knowing how Rose is, she accepted it for what it was, a true gesturer of love and friendship. And getting her a van to drive is just icing on the cake. Seems they have all changed a lot over the years. I hope we see more Emmett and Rose going forward.
It was nice that you let your sense of humor show thru too. My favorite line, after "Think of it as an end-run around Edward," was: “Rose and I won't eat you, even if you do cut your finger."
The girls weekend sounded really nice. It is great to see them all interact as women, not young girls. The new dynamic with Esme not the mother figure, except to Alice to some extent, is refreshing. It is time they are equals, having equals to share with. As women, it is our nature to lean on each other, so I am glad they have rekindled that bond on a higher level. Before Bella was way too young and immature for it. I hope to see more of it going forward.
I enjoyed the tiff between Edward and Bella. She finally says what she thinks. He seems to be treating her as more of an equal now, which is what they both need. His honesty about how he feels is refreshing. He is not trying to hide anything from her, which she realizes as his jealousy shows thru. My heart breaks a little for him, but I have faith you will make it all work out realistically well. Maybe knowing the true depth of his friendship with Mark will help her not feel bad when she is ready to move on. She is starting to acknowledge that she has feelings for Edward, she just isn’t ready to categorize them yet.
And here is just a thought. If they do end up back together, will Bella want to be changed?
| neeza90 chapter 24 . 12/8/2008
uh I love this story so much! Everyone's character is really spot on. I'm dreading having this story end. lol
| hammondgirl chapter 24 . 12/8/2008
I just wanted to tell you that I'm done asking questions. I'm done pushing you for more. I can see that you're getting there on your own. Oh, and that your story is wonderful. Seriously, I love it. I am always so excited to see an update notice in my inbox, and I'm always impressed with your storyline. It is fabulous!
I must be seriously deprived - I've never even heard of Lush!
Off to peruse the website...