Reviews for SC2: Hayate's Magical What If Story
Cyberchao X chapter 7 . 2/8/2011
Aw man! Just when it was getting good, you scrap it. Although, now I'm actually noticing what you originally rated this fic, and I must say...you seem to aim low an awful lot. Seriously, a flat K? With all that happened in Chapter 5? Not buying it. I'd probably go T just to be safe, but at the very least, I'd figure this one for a K.
Cyberchao X chapter 6 . 2/8/2011
Haha, well done, including the A route as a dream while still keeping F as canon. Good work with everything else regarding Omeda, too.
Cyberchao X chapter 5 . 2/8/2011
Very good, although there are a couple of times when you switch into first person-once in Omake C (a first-person plural) and once in Omake F (singular, regarding the shifting of the camera). Other than that, wonderful. (My "chosen path" was D, then I tried F and then I went back to read the others.)
Cyberchao X chapter 4 . 2/8/2011
Beautiful stuff. Y'know, "Reina" is Spanish for "Queen". Very good name.
Cyberchao X chapter 3 . 2/7/2011
Well well well, looks like we have a winner after all.
Cyberchao X chapter 2 . 2/7/2011
Ah, knowledge can be a dangerous thing for writers...
Cyberchao X chapter 1 . 2/3/2011
I took a look at your "current" work and despite being in a fandom I liked (yet another MSLN fic), it didn't really appeal to me (AUs can be hit-or-miss sometimes)...then I noticed that the "last updated" date was in 2009! Mou...what happened to you? Granted, I'm not exactly reliable, but I've never gone an entire year without posting anything! (Although I apparently came close once; there's absolutely nothing in between an intended multi that was abandoned after one chapter on 8/27/07 and a oneshot on 8/20/08)

...I think I need to do more, though.

*about to send* B'duh...completely forgot to actually review the chapter at hand. Probably gonna have to reread it to remind me what it is I'm reviewing. Compared to the original, it seemed a tad...weak, but then again sequels often are. (Except for when I decided to reclassify my fictionpress epic into a trilogy, at which point the first installment was OBVIOUSLY the weakest due to how young I was at the time of writing it, and in my mind the third book is by far the best, and I really need to post more of it since there are still twenty-someodd unposted chapters, and oh god I'm making the review all about me again. STUPID STUPID STUPID!)
drinker chapter 2 . 11/20/2010
Your story is fine and all, but you should know that they use dimensional travel, thus bypassing Light speed. Second, their ships are magic powered, thus they have magic engine that probably draws power externally. So Fuel wouldn't actually be a problem.
markesellus chapter 7 . 6/14/2009
Meep! So you haven't seen me in awhile. ...Yeah, I should really get around to your new stories and things. Anyway! I finally finished Shard Card 1 and 2 after a year of telling you I would read it. .' So things are quite interesting with Andromeda, especially this new update about her body. Every time Hayate talks with Reina it makes me really sad because there are so many pairings going on! Well, you write a lot of author's notes. Very cool course load by the way. Go Economics! ;)
Syaoran Li Clow chapter 7 . 11/9/2008
I didn’t get it, what was this?
Major Mike Powell III chapter 7 . 11/9/2008
Well, well, soldier...

This was an interesting development.

Some HayaReina goodness. That was Ok. LOL

There COULD'VE been some TomAte here, but meh...

So, Hayate's off to interrogate Omeda. Let's see what she can get outta her.

Nice work, marine. Keep it up. And make the next chapter LONGER, damn it!

Update ASAP! That's an order!

Semper-Fi! Carry on!
Spikesagitta chapter 3 . 10/31/2008
cool, finally something like a plot in this :)
Teresa Kaiju chapter 6 . 10/23/2008
Getting more interesting with each chapter. Good work for the most part. The bit about the asteroids is far less than clear, and, of course, unnecessary to the story.
Major Mike Powell III chapter 6 . 10/12/2008
Well, well, soldier...

This was interesting.

Hayate havin' doubts? Ah, so much temptation. LOL Nice work.

Omeda havin' a chat with...ghosts? Err...Ok.

Anyway. This was pretty good, marine. I liked this.

Update ASAP! That's an order!

Semper-Fi! Carry on!
Templar of Shurouga chapter 6 . 10/11/2008
*Sigh* I can't help but feel a bit sorry for poor Hayate. Feeling doubts filling your heart is one the worst things that can happen to you.

Having said that, though, one must recognize that, while doubts leave your soul hurt and weak, you feel like going back when your loved one looks at you tenderly. Consider that, okay? ;)

Kudos to you, my dear knight. Keep up the good work.

P.S. I do. I believe in reincarnation.
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