|Reviews for Perfect World|
| sleepy queens chapter 1 . 8/26/2009
Yeah, Peter's preoccupied, the little rat. Anyway, so cute. I could completely imagine the Marauders having snowball fights, even as adults. In fact, if they all survived, I bet they would even do it as they get even older. You know, play with their grandchildren :)
| seriesreader chapter 1 . 5/10/2009
it made me smile happily and sadly (for some parts)...but beautiful all the same...:)
| AmanitaMuscaria chapter 1 . 2/11/2009
This is lovely. I like the small incidentals, like Lily throwing up on Sirius' shoes, and Peter being distracted.
A calm moment, as captured in the snow globe, before all that we know is coming - a well-wrought image.
| ElvendorkLuVer chapter 1 . 1/11/2009
I luv it!
| twilightscallingme chapter 1 . 9/13/2008
This was so beautiful in many ways. My favorite quote was by my favorite character, naturally -
“He’d better not be. How can you call a girl Sirius?”
I think you got the characters down to a T. And, the ending was perfect. great job.
| Mary Gooby chapter 1 . 9/5/2008
Aw, that was fantastic!
G2G, my computer's leaking onion juice, my eyes hurt when I look at it.
| Fed up with this crap chapter 1 . 9/2/2008
Siria? *rotflmao* that's cute and sweet.
| Cassandra's Cross chapter 1 . 9/1/2008
Oh, I am SO far behind in my reading and reviewing! Sorry about that, but this weekend has been unbelievably hectic. This was very bittersweet. It was a long, long time before Harry knew that 'perfect world,' wasn't it? If indeed he ever did. I've often thought Harry's memories would have prevented him from ever believing in or being able to fully enjoy life. Ah, well. Nicely done, Katy.
| mustardgirl1128 chapter 1 . 8/29/2008
Beautiful! And-gasp-NO WEASLEYS! LOL.
Anyway, I loved this! Sirius Remus Peter Potter? Hahahahah. That was hilarious. Very sweet-I loved how you made their friendship part of a perfect little world, and I loved Lily throwing up on Sirius's shoes-gross, but funny. :) Great job, this was fantastic!
| gwennlkj chapter 1 . 8/29/2008
That's so moving!
| silverbirch chapter 1 . 8/29/2008
It was lovely. So sad, but so lovely. You caught the characters without the silliness and cliche that goes with them normally.
| McFlyFan101 chapter 1 . 8/29/2008
Sirius Remus Peter Potter? I'm glad they didn't call him that! XD Really cute story
| Laughing Luna chapter 1 . 8/29/2008
That was so cute! You should write more Lily. You did a great job with her.
| Lexie-H chapter 1 . 8/29/2008
Oh wow, Katy. This is beautiful. You describe pregnancy in a way I expect only a mother could (I myself obviously have no idea, and was spellbound...)
I love the serenity that seems present in everything Lily sees... even if she isn't blooming, like Alice, I can certainly imagine a quiet glow, as she sits by the fire )
The snowglobe is a lovely touch, and I especially liked the way you undercut everything at the end, with the boys being called away - and yet your tone remained consistent, almost dreamlike.
I really, really loved this.
I did notice a few things though (here comes the concrit!):
1. You've misspelt 'friends' in the summary that I received with my email. I don't know if this has already been fixed, but if not, I'd certainly check that out...
2. "he is more wary of this than he was since he suggested" - this is a VERY baffling way to word your sentence. I get essentially what you're trying to say, but if feels clumsy, and I had to re-read it a few times to make sense of it. I suggest you remove the "of this than he was" part - and also, changing 'he suggested' to 'his suggestion', because saying "He is more wary since his suggestion of ice cream and ketchup" - or even better, "He has been more wary since his suggestion of ice cream and ketchup" ! - maintains the basic idea you're trying to convey without complicating it with unnecessary words... ?
3. Again, a simple question of word choice: "insulated from the world outside by the curtains" - insulated stumped me for a second. Of course, the image is perfectly sound, but I had to stop and think about it for a moment because it jarred me a little. Perhaps that's just me, and if so, please ignore! but it did occur to me that 'isolated' would also work quite well and didn't seem so ... unexpected?
Just three little things! I hope they're of mild help )
I really, truly love this, and you KNOW what a big fan of these characters I am (I had to laugh at you throwing a Prewett in at the end - couldn't resist, eh?)
| Eryn Slith chapter 1 . 8/29/2008
Wow. Your description was really good! I really got the feeling of a perfect little world!