Reviews for Apple Pie
kongosoha chapter 1 . 2/14
Wonderfully done, simple and powerful. I love your style and how in character you wrote them with almost no dialogue! A writing!
bluepianos chapter 1 . 8/6/2013
Oh, this is so lovely, dear, I feel like I just walked through a really quiet hallway with pictures of this whole fic happening, like none of this was very descriptive and I had to imagine most of it myself but the little sentences made it quite a treat to read. I love the advancement from a slightly detached Ed to an affectionate Ed at the end. Wonderful work!
Guest chapter 1 . 12/6/2012
This was so perfect .in every way
Guest chapter 1 . 9/15/2012
Perfect charictarization, and so adorable, yet hot!
nori chapter 1 . 8/7/2012
pretty good
Etaine Rain chapter 1 . 5/4/2010
A This is too fluffy3
Peace Sign Freak chapter 1 . 1/28/2010
I love it! i liked the symbolic value of the story. I loiked how you had made Ed murmurs something that isn't about her near Winry then he murmurerd again about her while near her. I liked the balance of the atmosphere between Winry and Edward. The way the story was written, it reminded me of a poem because of the short and separate sentences.
vucizalis chapter 1 . 10/10/2009
Great one-shot.
kayy christine chapter 1 . 9/29/2009
Loved it!
Gambhrina chapter 1 . 4/13/2009
A lovely story!
Aprillis chapter 1 . 3/19/2009
I'm impressed by the way you made both Ed and Winry totally IC! Bravo!

(Especially Ed, since he is a complex character and portraying him in written form is hard. He mostly shows his affections/care through actions, not words - and even then it is tough love. Ed would not readily act all lovey-dovey towards Winry after having hot-sex0r, and while we're at it, he wouldn't utter 'I love you' easily either. In the manga, he is still denying the fact that he might have feelings for Winry, so it would be stupid to have him suddenly magically realize that he was head over heels with her. Oh, I'm not complaining, actually I thought you addressed all these points nicely)

And I also like that the sex was tastefully written, not dominating the entire story but well intergrated as a whole.

After lurking around in fanficrants in LJ, I was a bit turned-off by fanfics in general. Thanks for renewing my faith and making my day D
Devoted Eye chapter 1 . 2/26/2009
Uhmm... yeah... So that was pretty awesome.

I really liked the way you described the tension between the two. Especially Ed's reluctance and awkwardness with words. This is frighteningly close to how I would picture the two of them getting together.

Thanks for the excellent piece of work!
hapan chapter 1 . 11/17/2008
Hmm, I really enjoyed this. Thank you for writing!
Orange Singer chapter 1 . 10/7/2008
completely awesome. A bit confused by the bedroom scene however. What had he whispered? I have two ideas, but I am not sure which fits. Anyway, this fic is amazing. Your writing style is very intriguing. Keep it up!
Little Japanime Girl chapter 1 . 9/23/2008
I absolutely love this. The way it's written and what's not said is exactly what is being heard the most. Wonderful style.
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