I just started reading your story, and I think it's great! It's a nice twist from the usual Naruto stories. I also like where you have the plans from both sides not working perfectly, makes the story more believable. Keep up the great work!

The plot continues to thicken, and considering it was already thick enough to resist a table knife that is quite a feat.

I cant really criticise if you have a problem writing action scenes as I have almost no writing skill whatsoever! Stick to what you do well, its still a very good story just on the plot alone.

Once again you add some realism to a world sadly lacking in it. And its nice to see that not everybody in the training program is corrupt.

awesome story, i hope you keep updateing

Hm...good investigative work by the chunin instructor but I wonder if there will be reprucissions from Danzo's people for it. So Sakura is in on it a little bit, that's good she knows a little something about the situation. I can tell things are gettin setup for something, can't wait to see were this goes. You don't have to address this in your next A/N its just me thinking aloud. If Sarutobi does die in the Sound/Sand invasion would Jiraiya be the one to over see this operation or would his ANBU do it. But like I said just me thinking aloud. Look forward to the next one!

I Really Really Really Like Your Story You Should Definitly Keep Writing it GoOd JoB AnD K eEp Up ThE gOoD WoRk!

I like it so far. There werent any major grammar or punctuation errors that I noticed and despite the changes youre putting Naruto and Sakura through, their characters are spot on. Good work. I only wish you would update faster. (Which is hypocritical of me...)

"Sakura is not going to be sent there to be raped and killed. Shame on the people who wanted that to happen." Ahh irrational overblown Sakura hatred, it really wouldn't be Naruto fandom without you.

(Still) enjoying where this is going. Thanks for the regular updates, thanks for not showing overblown irrational (ok mostly irrational) Sakura hatred. For using grammar, spell check and generally doing a good job.

Anyway keep up the good work, am looking forward to the next chapter.

ausome chapter!

OH, another chapter. I've not seen many fics do well after a certain point. Yours is going strong. Keep it up and I hope to see more. I'm wondering though, is that Iruka wondering about things? Where's Kakashi? Sasuke is doing what? ehh, you get my line of questioning. Are they still going to be Team Seven or is Jiraiya going to be popping up?

the chuunin died huh?

awesome is awesome.

And scary too :-(

I love what you're doing with this story. Is so original and refreshing. The plot is definitely different from anything Ive seen recently. The character development is very well done especially with the subtle interactions between Naruto and Sakura.

Keep it up.

well, i'm curious as to the last part of this chapter (above the root officer informing donzo of a problem) it seems something as happened to the instructor, that was obvious, the question is what? you'll most likely revieal it at some point but that just made me groan in frustration. a nice little cliffhanger. orver all, this story is so far good and i'm eager for more.

interesting and it keeps you reading without being to far fetched

LOL that was really good chapter I hoping u continue writing still