Reviews for Picture Book
jumping off of rocky cliffs chapter 1 . 1/10/2009
Although I don't know the fandom, I still think that it's a sweet little poem. I especially like the last stanza; your rhyming of "awakening" and "dressing" is a bit unexpected, but that's what makes it good.

And although you did rhyme "truth" with itself, I still think that it works, given the other two lines in the stanza.

(BTW: I know you wanted me to review something of yours in respond for you doing it to me, but I didn't know which one to do, or if you wanted one in specific. So, yeah.)
Mike Kromer chapter 1 . 10/2/2008
Wow, I'm impresed, very good on an image poem, loved it, keep up the good work
goku chapter 1 . 9/24/2008
i love u . . . i'll increase your allowance, promise!..
Phantom shadow mask chapter 1 . 9/15/2008
Awesome poem even though its sad but still its awesome. -
Laa Chase chapter 1 . 9/4/2008
At line 21 you loose rhyme, because you change the structure. In fact, I completely lost interest after that point because I'm obsessive about those things. Simply switch line 21 around with 22 and it will still rhyme, and even still make sense. But line 26 and 28, rhyming truth with truth? Bleh. I'd consider revising those four lines if I were you.

Just my brutal, honest opinion. I'm not a fan of fic poems so you'll have to take the brunt of my reasoning.

No need to listen to me or anything. Just saying. Ciao!