|Reviews for Poltergeist the Legacy Fanfiction: Memories|
| Kayleigh-talitha chapter 1 . 12/31/2008
I like the general idea of this story, and you obviously have a flair for writing, however, it felt rushed to me. Try to add more details, make it longer, it's the kind of story wich can be easily a multiple chapter story. Maybe more thoughts of the characters, more of what they're doing, write it out.
One tip, indeed there's not much known about NIck's past but there are some things we do know, for example, Derek and NIck's father worked for the same house, they knew eachother and therefor Derek would have known if Nick lived some place else since Major Boyle worked for him.