|Reviews for Her Eyes|
| Fanta3 chapter 1 . 9/21/2008
Hmm this is too short to my taste :)
In fact, if you are obsessed by this scene, why not incorporate it into a longer one shot, one where Marcus and the Queen would confront each other... or Marcus's dream altogether, like one of his fight with the Queen, and not just the eyes thingy. Anyways.
| El Gringo Loco chapter 1 . 9/9/2008
Short and sweet - thank you for sharing it with us.
| deemn chapter 1 . 9/8/2008
I like it. Wish it was longer. :D
One thing I would suggest is to avoid, at all costs, ever describing someone's eyes as chocolate orbs. Fanfiction has killed it, deader than dead.
Other than that, this was great. Thanks for writing this!