It's a good plot...but I'm going to be honest. I really hate doing this, I'm no professional, but I'm going to critique ;x Sorry if I sound a bit harsh D:!

1. Spell check. - Some words are spelt wrong or are in the wrong position for its meaning (ex. too & to, know & no). If you type out a draft on Microsoft Word, it can usually help with these small mistakes(:

2. Commas & breaking things up! - Comas are a lovely item that can help break up run-ons. Also, try not to cram everything in one sentance. Periods can help(: Here's an example..."The only thing that made him not as normal as the other kids in the world is the fact, that he has ghost powers and is known as the world's hero Danny Phantom, and he was about to be late for class because of a ghost" (I took out the duh part ;x) heres my edit: "The only thing that made him not as normal as the other kids in the world is the fact that he has ghost powers, and is known as the world's hero, Danny Phantom. He was about to be late for class because of a ghost."

3. Abbreviations - abbrvs. are awesome!...when you're texting. If you're posting a REAL story somewhere were people are going to be reading said story, try to spell things out. Ex:"'Thanks, for helping me, and sorry..for knocking YA down...YA know.'Danny said to her." ya correctly spelt is yeah. & even if it wasnt abbrv. it would still be used in the wrong tense here. "Sorry...for knocking YOU down...YOU know." works better. But, I can see where you would use this. You want him sounding more teeny, which I totally get(: in this case, you can write it like this: "Sory...for knocking ya' down.."

Sorry if I came out sounding harsh ): I'm just trying to help you be a better writer, no flame intended(: other than these small mistakes, I found it actually very good. - Em

that's so terrible that that happened to Sam. i hope she feels better. Also she gets to yell at Danny whenever she wants.

-FLINX

it's very nice. Danny and Sam sure have changed. i wonder what happened to tucker. i know it's the first chapter but I'm just wondering.

-FLINX

you did it again,leaving it off at the best part,grrrrrrr! keep up the great work

wtf u cant just spring something up like that,ur a greaat writer and i hope i get to read the rest soon.

This is a really great story! If only you'd update. lolz.

I love it us such a good twist :) poor danny :(

I love it us such a good twist :) poor danny :(

Wow please update!

okay please update soon!

Aww sad! Bummer for Sam! I can't wait for the next cHAPTER THOUGH! (AS ALWAYS!)

Banana!

HO CRAP! YOU NEED TO UPDATE! hehhe, that cute lil girls B-day, I read it July 18 instead of June 18, and I Got excited caise July 18 is my birthday, Anyway...UPDATE SOON OR SUFFER THE WRATH OF BUTTERSCOTCH! MY BEAR THAT I MADE IN HELL!(coughBUILD-A-BEAR!cough)

Loved it!

oh okay, for 'little old you', ill review...

very good

what grade are they in?

Plz keep up the good writing.

sry i haven't been adding more stories

should be adding one soon. (hopefully)

AND...you should keep writing until your brain fries!

From: the mysterious childofdannyphantom

i loved it! you gotta finish the story! i love how youve changed their outfits!