|Reviews for Skittles|
| EmoWithASpork chapter 1 . 6/19/2010
this was the first story I ever read on fanfiction and I didn't even realize it was slash till 3 months later lol
P. story got me obsessed with skittles
| Tower of Babel chapter 1 . 6/6/2010
You have an interesting story, but your style and grammer needs work. I didn't really notice any Yaoi connection between the characters. FYI, the fact that Sasuke would let Naruto sit on him for 20 minutes just for candy is inconceivable. And, there's no need for swearing in such a short story.
You could have expanded the story more to show character depth in how they got into this situation, and you seem to have some inner dialogue and conversional/confrontational issues between the characters that need addressing. Also, there's lack of punctuation in some places. Furthermore, to show more emotion, try to use some descriptive narrative between and at the end of conversion, instead of saying he/she said.
Thanks for reviewing my story.
| Kurai Kokoro chapter 1 . 1/27/2009
hilarious! naruto is such a dense idiot. & sasuke has no taste buds. skittles are great!
| LovelySinner7 chapter 1 . 9/8/2008
...! hahah too sweet and yeah sasUKE skittles are like god's creation