yes please continue why is he running from her she dont even know him and alice was priceless with her spukiness

really good so far

I think it's great so far. Please continue

Hi!

So first off, I'm here because I got the link off the all human community. I don't usually check them out, but I'm glad I did. I saw the summary and had this compulsion to see who put up a hit on Bella :p

The prologue was fantastic. Very well done. Both ominious, vague yet compelling :p I sound like an art critic.

The first real chapter was interesting. You don't explain things right out, but you give us enough detail that we understand, and you don't lose the flow of the story by saying 'Bella's parents died in a car crash' right out.

I also liked all the humans working at the cafe. A lot of people - including myself- group them off in all humans, which I enjoy.

Sorry for rambling, but I noticed you didn't have to many reviews (which I don't understand because this story is fab) so I decided to write a super long and descripitve one! Yay!

Update soon, and I do think you should continue.

-Maggie

I have to say..for a first time fanfic writer..you've got great potential..keep on going!

Are you kidding me? This story is so worth continuing. This story ROCKS! I wanna know what happens next. I guess that call was that Bella is his next target. I guess the family knows about Edward's secret right? Hope you update soon

i love hershey _

No, no. Keep going. I'm loving this story. Oh My Gosh. I'm on a high right now b/c you wrote so well. Yay yay yay!

Please keep going.-Unleashes puppy eyes-

Sincerely,

BeingDazzledByEdward

love the story but is edward a vampire or a human with mind-reading abilities?

woww...PLEASE UPDATE ASAP!

Hey really like this one. I hope you update soon _