|Reviews for Death of Vo Toral|
| Danilla chapter 1 . 8/19/2009
Needs a bit of work. Mostly grammer and a bit of spelling.
"They met at early dawn and fit up in full armor."
'suited up in full armor' would be more appropriate.
Grab some shakespeare, compare your archaic speech with his and practice being consistant.
Keep it up!
| Ailiel Raith of Ithilien chapter 1 . 5/14/2009
Hm...the story concept itself is interesting. The Mandorallen in this fic is reminiscent of the one in the books. There's just a slight problem with the use of archaic style of speech - it's not very consistent. Other than that, it's great for a first fic. :)
| CStardust chapter 1 . 9/22/2008
I mean, for all the fact that it was a little short, and I haven't read the series, I liked it.
Please read some of my stories!
| Demons Of Doom chapter 1 . 9/11/2008