|Reviews for Consummation|
| WD-Den-Mum chapter 1 . 9/19/2008
| muggle1983 chapter 3 . 9/19/2008
I love absolutely love this story. It's great how you entwine the dark and light, sweet and sad.
| Swangal chapter 3 . 9/19/2008
Beautiful story. Just wonderful. I love Edward's POV! Keep writing!
| Blynn chapter 3 . 9/19/2008
We should marry our stories together :)
You completely and utterly captured Edward. Perfection. I really can't wait to read more. You should take a peak at my story the honeymoon scene through bella's eyes right where the book left off. I think it would be so fun if you read my story and wrote Edwards perspective of everything that went on that night! Haha I have tried to write it through Edwards perspective and I can never quite capture him the way I want so I end up throwing all of the story out. If you would like to write Edwards perspective of my story I would be so honored and happy it's killing me that I can't really get into his head. E-mail me back!
| usagi.cullen chapter 3 . 9/19/2008
Love your take on this event. I really think you have a great grasp of what Edward would think.
I hope you continue the story with Edward and Bella's first night together after Bella becomes a vampire. Poor guy, he needs some happy time :)
Also, it would be interesting to see your take on how much Edward had changed from the honeymoon to the "second honeymoon" as it appears that he is so much more comfortable with himself and Bella (I guess Bella's very near death experience loosened him up a lot more than her other previous experiences with death). The second honeymoon in their cottage would be filled with so much love, awe and probably relief. He is so happy when they talk about balancing interests in the morning. It would be interesting to know what Edward was thinking about all the new changes and not having to worry about killing his Bella.
Quite the contrast between human and vampire experiences.
| slimjimjerky chapter 3 . 9/19/2008
| NubianGoddess chapter 2 . 9/13/2008
Geez. Edward seriously needs to stop overeacting to things. I mean, I know she got bruises, but at least he didn't kill her.
| slimjimjerky chapter 1 . 9/10/2008
that was unbelievable!
it was so much like Edward!
You are an amazing writer!
Please continue this story!
Write their first time in Edward's point of view!
| rosalindleconte chapter 1 . 9/10/2008
I wanted to tell you how much I enjoyed your story and I wanted to encourage you to continue writing.
One of the things that was most disappointing for me in BD was the lost inner voices that made Twilight so captivating.
I really enjoyed your discovery of Edward's inner experience. To me that image...on the beach, tiny waves lapping his body, bathed in the moonlight, waiting for her, wanting her...geesh. You ahve really added soemthing that was missing!
The use of 'devotion' in your title, says it all.
Thank you and bring it on! YOU got game.
| Celtic Sorceress chapter 1 . 9/9/2008
Excellent job. You certainly captured Edward's thoughts well and it was written tastefully. Very enjoyable fic, probably the best I have found on Twilight so far. I enjoy the canon or expanded on canon stories best instead of the completely changed AU. Can't wait to see if you come up with anything else for these characters next! Well done.