|Reviews for Experiment on loose|
| WolfDeity666 chapter 1 . 3/15/2010
OMG! that was amazing :3
GO DEMYX, GO!
gotta love the little guy's gutd for fightion off that monster. i kned i wouldn;t have been able to
Please continue doing great work!
| Malin chapter 1 . 2/17/2010
(aka ThexNameless that's too lazy to log in)
Really cute little story!
And very interesting to get the story behind the pic you showed me ;P
| Sylphix chapter 1 . 2/12/2010
Really nice story -
I like how you write, but you know already know that
| Caty-Cross chapter 1 . 2/12/2010
I love this XD I was hooked all the way through! Poor Demmy! and him biting Axel! and then kissing Xiggy X3! i was like :O but seriously i loved it! Had to be added to favourites XD
| Dance.Grimmjow.Dance chapter 1 . 2/12/2010
Oh, I like this. It was angsty for me. :D
| Keiko Sahara chapter 1 . 1/27/2010
I love this story. I thought I already reviewed it but I checked and I couldn't find my review. Well, here it is. I love this. I especially like Axel protecting Demy in the first scene. I'm curious as to what prank Axel pranked him with to leave Demy that mad at him.
| DanseMancer chapter 1 . 10/4/2009
I love the dramatic fight and the akudem parts. there so sweet together! even if they have almost opposite personalitys
| Dawn of Chaos chapter 1 . 9/9/2009
neat idea. its unique. glad to read something with a different twist every once in a while. terrific creature by the way XD a very sweet ending as well. with a hint of humor!
but umm...gush...is that supposed to be gash? idk thought i'd ask.
| thunDaClap chapter 1 . 4/26/2009
I'm guessing you're the kind of person who likes a lil XigDem, am I right? Huh? Huh? *nudges arm until you punch me.*
| suicidal-seme chapter 1 . 2/4/2009
Poor Demyx, got unconscious three times! lolz.
I ususally don't dig battle scenes, but I did enjoy this one, and the dedication of Axel is admirable too.
| Kitsune Alchemist chapter 1 . 1/9/2009
A little strange, but fairly good. Just wondering when Demyx got magical healing powers, 'cuz that was what weirded me out most.
Also, whenever someone else starts speaking, a new paragraph needs to be created, so you might want to go break some of the paragraphs up a little.
Other than that, it was really good and I liked the idea for the plot, so, nicely done.
| Asryel chapter 1 . 1/2/2009
hey! i said i would review! i'm a little out of practise though so you will have to excuse any blunders and if i offend i am sorry my aim is constructive criticism, not to flame. Anywho here goes.
alrighty first of all there is a typo in your title it should be "experiment" not experiement an easy mistake to make so don't worry, i would also recommend looking into beta's they proof read your work for spelling errors and grammatical mistakes. I have a beta (not on ) and it makes life so much easier.
the story i think needs a little more background its a bit confusing at the start, your not quite sure whats wrong with Demyx and why he is upset. And then it rushes too quickly into the action sequence, a little confusing.
I really like the idea of Demyx being able to heal because of his ability to control water though thats really cool! do you think i might be able to use it (with appropriate acknowledgements of course) for one of my stories? lol if not thats cool anyway hope this has been helpful!
best regards! Asryel
| AnDe101 chapter 1 . 10/20/2008
Wee! I finally have a a couple days off and so I made a check-list of things to get done and reading your stories was in my top 5 things to docoz I promised I would read them and I did! :D And aw -gives Dem-Dem a lollipop- it's okay Nurse Axel is there to keep ya company xD. The last sentence made me giggle Demyx is not fully free from pranks yet x] Revenge Demy...the one who was pranked should become the pranker(lol I'm not sure if this is even a word but oh wells!) 8D
| KissMeImOnlyPlastic chapter 1 . 10/19/2008
I loved this story as well.
You have a knack for writing.
The kiss made me laugh a little, Xigbar must've been shocked.
| ElegantButler chapter 1 . 9/13/2008
That was an exciting tale. I'm glad Demyx is going to be alright!