Reviews for Kaname xxx Sousuke
megumiA chapter 6 . 9/20/2014
kinda short and telling slobby stat report. sorry its just my view and you can even tell by the way its presented still i like the ltsy bit idea of the whole thing. just one more-you kkinda made me laugh hard at Chapter 4-i almost blurted out when you inserted 'Kagome' there ehheehe i mean WTH! what was that?!/ thats all
Guest chapter 5 . 10/22/2013
I gotta say, as someone who has been through pregnancy, this is one of the most painful things I have ever read. You say you did research, but considering I did constant research before and throughout my pregnancy, I can tell you didn't. BH contractions are rarely painful, irregular, and short. All contractions are short, lasting for seconds, not minutes, and certainly not hours. Your part with the BH contractions sounds like appendicitis, a serious condition which afflicts many pregnant women, since it can be brought about through constipation, a common side effect of pregnancy due to the progestin and relaxen in the body.

The fact that Kaname felt the first kicks at, what, 30 weeks? ...that baby is dead. Sorry. Someone as thin as Kaname would have felt the first kicks as early as 15/16 weeks (as I did), more likely around 18, and certainly no later than 22. The ultrasound to determine the baby's gender is done between 16-18 weeks, the only real exceptions being if the baby does not cooperate. Also, I find it hard to believe Kaname would have been so lax in her visits. You visit the OB monthly until about 24 weeks, then it's every 2 weeks until 32, then it's weekly until birth.

Real labor is pretty obvious. As I said, BH contractions come at irregular intervals and are rarely painful. True contractions come at regular, systematically decreasing intervals, and are highly uncomfortable to start and grow in pain, intensity, and duration. About the only thing you were accurate on was having a whole-day labor. Labor is in 3 stages, by the way. There's early labor, which are the beginning of contractions. This lasts typically anywhere from 10 hours to as painfully and mercilessly long as over 30. Active labor is when your body is preparing the last bit, and is still part of the 1st stage. You dilate the rest of the way quite quickly, the pain is far more intense, and the contractions rapidly get closer together. It's considered that when they are 5-7 minutes apart is when you should go to the hospital.

Second stage is delivery. Contractions come 1-2 minutes apart. You only push during contractions, which are being measured by a device with sensors set up all over your stomach. The nurse is the one with you for this until you're right about to deliver. The doctor isn't even in the hospital until the nurse gives 'em a call and says it's time. Second stage lasts about 1.5-2 hours, typically, for a first time birth, but shorter isn't unheard of. My own was 20 minutes. The nurse was surprised and had to go call the doctor and tell him to get his butt to the hospital ASAP 'cause it was happening sooner than anticipated.

Third stage is delivering the placenta. This happens about 10 minutes or so after delivering the baby. It's a whole lot of fun, really. The doctor kinda wiggles it and tugs it out of there, makes sure it didn't break so he doesn't have to go fishing out the rest. I just loved that part. (Yes, I'm being sarcastic, this was more uncomfortable than delivering the baby, in its own way)

Then you get STITCHES! Because babies have heads that are about 10-14cm big and they came through a 10cm cervix and a much MUCH smaller vagina. It's called perineal tearing and requires weeks of aftercare. There's also lochia, which is post-partum bleeding, and lasts for 6 weeks. Yup. As if everything else wasn't difficult enough, you get to follow it up with essentially a 6-week-long period! (Although if you breastfeed, odds are low you'll have a real period for most of the time you spend breastfeeding, since your body tries not to ovulate when it knows you're already caring for a little one so that you maintain the physical resources to care for your progeny)

...And I have no idea where you got the idea that she would need an oxygen mask. No medical professional that doesn't deserve to be fired and have all certification stripped would ever do that simply to shut her up, and there was no need for oxygen. If anything, it could make things more dangerous for both the mother and the child. At full term, a pregnant woman has 1.5x as much blood pumping through her veins, and is very oxygenated to care for both her and the child. Extra oxygen would be dangerous and could lead to fainting and affect the baby and labor as well... It wouldn't happen unless her O2 was dangerously low.


This is all info that's VERY easy to find, I don't even need my own experiences to know all of this. Please don't claim you've done research when it's painfully obvious you didn't.
kitsunelullaby chapter 5 . 6/9/2013
as long as you are having fun that's all that really matters :)
kitsunelullaby chapter 4 . 6/9/2013
not as military but still good :) i think it would be a good idea if you put some sort of divider between the story and your speech or put your speech in bold
Guest chapter 1 . 3/5/2013
you should have made them graduate then have a kid...but thts just my opinion ghee
angel rodriguez chapter 5 . 1/13/2013
i think it wass a very good seies, leaves at a bit of a cliff hanger though, i wanna know how it goes and everything, and possibly how the kid grows a little
Guest chapter 2 . 12/11/2012
Kokoa shuzen chapter 5 . 11/30/2012
This Is grate write mor more more now NOW I WANT TO KNOW IF IT IS A BOY OR A GIR

SUGESTION: make the child a girl
janzen222 chapter 5 . 8/18/2012
wow i was surprised to see this was updated its decent but not great yet i know you can do alot better but it was good enough to keep my attention and thats pretty hard to do unless its a decent story i look forward to seeing more chapters that are even better then the previous ones-
My Broken Voice chapter 3 . 7/3/2012
Kaname's father is in the United States and her mother died from cancer. If you wish to alternate the idea, please give a warning.
My Broken Voice chapter 1 . 7/2/2012
I will admit that my stories aren't as great, but that is because I don't have time to edit them throughly. If you are going to write a fan fiction, try to read over your work as you go so you can see if you had made any mistakes. Also, try not to make it seem like this was written from you prospective, but the character's prospective. Some people won't understand where you are trying to go and that will, without a doubt, make readers not want to read your story half way through. Try to describe things more, and more feeling into it, as if you WANTED to write this fanfiction. The idea is great, but without a great writng style, no one is going to want to read this, thus making the idea dust.
DragonoftheEastblue chapter 4 . 3/25/2011
shame this was a good story. would have loved to see how things turn out
shaithis1 chapter 2 . 1/20/2010
janzen222 chapter 4 . 1/2/2010
please contninue im a big fan of this story(i just started watching the anime xD) if u have writers block listen to some music it always helps me(Be a little more detailed in chapters and dont jump around to much_
crazy kid 0.o chapter 2 . 5/18/2009
um in the firt chapter her parents lived with her but its good so far i like it
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