Reviews for Harry Potter Mercenary
God1643 chapter 1 . 1/2/2018
A solid tale. Well done.
Guest chapter 1 . 12/12/2017
Small misspellings:

Imperious - Imperius

and standing up - and stand up

Legilamency - Legilimency

most Mind Magic - most Mind Magics

Snivelous - Snivellus

and Unspeakable badge - an Unspeakable badge

.The - The
(a full stop is missing from the previous paragraph)

in necessary - if necessary

murder with life sentences - murderer with life sentences
Guest chapter 1 . 12/12/2017
Patronus, not Partonus
Guest chapter 1 . 12/11/2017
WOW! Amazing, i loved it! The pacing is perfect, the way you developed the characters is so realistic and fantastic ots everything i ever wanted. Great job!
Eriza-chan chapter 1 . 12/8/2017
amazing, definitely going to read the sequel
Mintley8 chapter 1 . 11/26/2017
*giggling* I loved, thank you x
The Weatherwitch chapter 1 . 11/5/2017
Brilliant. Very well done xD
GeorgeTobor chapter 1 . 10/31/2017
Not enough wizards died...
For one, Dumbles needs to die.
Second 107% of the ministry deserves death.
And even then some will likely escape.
Every fool on the Wizgamote and their families had to be exterminated.

just read this again, now to the sequel, thanks for writing
the starrose chapter 1 . 10/21/2017
So good and funny!
xenosaiyan chapter 1 . 10/11/2017
Its so beautiful! Amazing Asses, Bloody Brilliant, I could come up with more but it all concludes to one thing.

Nice job!

samics chapter 1 . 10/1/2017
I really wish people would stop writing in first person and more importantly in present tense. A good story ruined by bad writing. It's REALLY difficult to write in first person without getting repetitive. "I did this, I did that, I I I," the Is just don't end and it becomes annoying to read. And present tense, oh man.. 'I punch the death eater,' what do you mean? You punch a death eater every morning you wake up? Or maybe every time one comes near you? Its simply too ambiguous to describe an action that you performed once, whereas simple past tense is really good at that.
Even if we ignore that, there is no consistency throughout the story. You write in present tense in one paragraph and in past tense in the next, only to revert back to present in the next one.
Otherwise a good story, no grammatical mistakes, good plot, action filled but not action flooded.. Improve on the tense and point of view aspects and it will be even better.
Btw, you missed an opportunity for a joke. You used 'for scientific purposes' where 'For Academic Purposes' would have fit nicely too
a person 56 chapter 1 . 8/19/2017
Hahahaha that's the shit I live this it's so funny and amusing and I can't even describe it poor Lucy he's gonna get it not that I feel bad for him : D
VizeerLord chapter 1 . 6/21/2017
Great stuff
AO Black chapter 1 . 6/6/2017
This was absolutely wonderful.
LupiusNeo chapter 1 . 5/26/2017
I'd like to think that in Part IV, the Maurauders saluted as one from the other side of the Veil. After all, carpet-bombing a Slytherin party like that could have only been a wishful dream for them.
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