Reviews for The Path He Had Walked
Guest chapter 3 . 3/28/2016
work on correct spelling for words
hellfire45 chapter 3 . 5/16/2013
make more chapters
Jonathan-L-Seig chapter 3 . 2/24/2012
not bad! LOVED IT!
Kalvorax chapter 3 . 12/7/2011
This chapter was good, mainly due to the fact you had a beta reader. Can you have him/her go through the first 2 chapters as well please?
hooked reader chapter 3 . 9/20/2011
everyread123 chapter 3 . 8/8/2011
great story so far can't wait for more chapters and have to say you are a great author and was wondering when the next chapter or chapters are coming out for birth of a Savior
D00rFr4m3 chapter 2 . 7/26/2011
Oh. My. God. IT BURNS! THe grammar... IT BURNS! AHHH! One word for ya, man. Beta. YOu need one. Badly. You have good ideas, and things. I would advise you to get a beta, and either co-author something to get a bit more experience writing a story in different ways, or read a few more fanfics. THe beta is the main thing you need, also, in the first chapter where he explained what happened to that women, don't'cha think that could've been worded a bit better, it was sorta emotionless, or you could not just get him to spit it out during the middle of dinner. Lol. Btw, as a side-note of sorts, where'd you get your name? StarCraft 1? The Protoss unit, Dragoons?
The Things We All Hold Dear chapter 3 . 7/10/2011
Naruto's a Pimp! NICE!
Irishfighter chapter 3 . 6/27/2011
great chapter
bleacher chapter 3 . 6/26/2011
nice story loving it so far
D00rFr4m3 chapter 1 . 5/13/2011
The plot is A okay! The...Grammar is simple atrocious.
bleacher chapter 2 . 1/7/2010
interesting chapter a update would be nice
Summons Shadow chapter 2 . 12/13/2009
interesting! great pairings!
WayDrifter chapter 2 . 6/28/2009
hehehehe nice. hope for some lemon soon. Please hurry up with next chapter
shyguy1818 chapter 2 . 6/27/2009
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