| Reviews for Fall of the White Lotus |
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  Charmfeather chapter 51 . 7/28 This was one of the best fanfiction stories I have ever read, I loved every part of it. Thank you so much for all of the time, love, and care you put into it over the years. |
 phoebehals chapter 20 . 7/27 I cant help but notice that while the elements and story telling is superb, you use a lot of ‘had’ with -ed. For example ‘Zuko and Katara had lingered on the dance floor and Katara had taught Zuko the Water Tribe dance that followed.’ It can be snipped to ‘Zuko and Katara lingered on the dance floor and Katara taught Zuko the Water Tribe dance that followed.’ Use your ‘had’s sparsely. May I suggest reading Writing Tools by Roy Peter Clark and On Writing Well by William Zinsser. These books helped me a lot in reading and writing fan fics. I started writing fics but they’re still rough drafts because I jump from one fic to another depending on my interests lol… |
| PinkPineapples chapter 27 . 4/3 Man I love how you write Toph, Uncle Iroh... everyone! |
| PinkPineapples chapter 23 . 4/3 Whaa? That guy is from the White Lotus? |
| PinkPineapples chapter 22 . 4/3 Not happy with Zuko here... they are dating other people. |
| PinkPineapples chapter 21 . 4/3 Oh my gosh Zuko... you did cover yourself in honey! hahaha |
| PinkPineapples chapter 20 . 4/3 I loved reading this from Hakoda's perspective, what a good dad he is. |
| PinkPineapples chapter 19 . 4/3 Wow, great chapter! |
| PinkPineapples chapter 18 . 4/3 Lovely chapter, as always. |
| PinkPineapples chapter 17 . 4/1 Yeah firebending style! |
| PinkPineapples chapter 16 . 4/1 My heart straight up melted... so touching. |
| PinkPineapples chapter 15 . 4/1 Stunning, you are a stunning writer. I'm breathless. |
| PinkPineapples chapter 14 . 4/1 Yes, go Hakoda! |
| PinkPineapples chapter 13 . 4/1 Oh my, Katara is perceptive. |
| PinkPineapples chapter 12 . 4/1 I love this story so much. Your writing is just beautiful! |