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![]() ![]() ![]() cool story i like it a lot |
![]() ![]() ![]() ...please use spellcheck... it hurts me to see so many spelling errors. The plot for the story has potential. Really, it does. It just needs a bit more time and practise. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like the start, but present tense does makes it all confusing, but meh we get where you were going!XD I loved the start, all mysterious and just nice! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I have several criticisms you would be wise to heed. First, your story is written in present tense, which is not advised, it just makes it unneccisarilly complicated. Second, your story is confusing and difficult to read to the point that I honestly doubt your ability to speak English. Your grammar is so atrocious that I'm not even sure what you were saying in many cases. In short, I think that it is terrible in every sense of the word, and needs serious revision to even be a DECENT, passable fic. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome story! Your grammar could use some work though...it made the story a little harder to read...but other than that I loved it! Sorry I'm so crazy I'm in love with Shadow and Mephiles and Silver...I love hedgies! Update soon please! |