Reviews for Yakko's Fight |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I'm..a little confused about the ages. But the story itself is nice. Great job! :) Keep it up! 8DDDDD |
![]() ![]() ![]() CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE |
![]() ![]() ![]() ME DON'T LIKE YOU. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Update more please |
![]() ![]() ![]() exams are important |
![]() ![]() ![]() Please write more please this is pretty good |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's decent. But not spectacular. When you are writing this please remember the old Show Not Tell. The story jumps around a lot and you keep your chapters a little too short. The story would be more engaging if you would add a hook at the end of a chapter. Something like, "suddenly, There was a knock at the door and my heart filled with dread." Or something to add suspense. Nice start. |
![]() ![]() OMG poor Yakko! I hope things work out. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sad day! |
![]() ![]() ![]() A tip: DON'T CURSE, IT'S MEAN! |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw poor yakko. but this story is a great idea. |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh...please update! this is a good story so far |
![]() ![]() ![]() Cool chapter. Nice interaction between the siblings. Keep the good writing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I have an idea you could use if you want to. My idea is: in chapter 1 they dont live on the Warner lot; Wakko and Dot get taken away; then Yakko takes them away from the home (sorta like kidnapping them but they want to go). Thats all I've got right now. Its a good story so far. Is you get good ideas, update soon |
![]() ![]() ![]() No! No! No! -sobs- You can't seperate the Warners you bad man from child services! Only Yakko knows how to take care of them! Ah... continue soon! |