|Reviews for Naruto: Shinobi Wars|
| Naruto.GOD chapter 9 . 6/27/2014
That definition of baba is so much better then when I looked the word up, said something about sweets, and thanks for clearing up the rest.
| Naruto.GOD chapter 2 . 6/27/2014
Once this shit starts then that prick better be dead.
| Naruto.GOD chapter 1 . 6/27/2014
You goddamn motherfucker before I read this chapter I have to say one thing Sakura's dad better be killed by her boyfriend. If not I'm going to be beyond pissed.
| Another Guest chapter 1 . 6/6/2014
I felt like adding another review to this awesome fanfic, listing the reasons why it is one of my favorites:
-characters have similar qualities to canon, they also have their own speaking habits
-the dialogues are natural, there are no long monologues spoken by three-year-olds whose vocabulary is way more advanced than mine is
-everything the characters do is more or less logical
-the plot is complex, giving every reader a few favorite characters instead of one (the reason why A Song of Ice and Fire is so popular nowadays)
-there is no bashing
-characters are not overpowered
I think I would come up with many more reasons if I gave it more time. Best of luck with both the story and your life. I hope you can find the time to update soon.
| Zarosian chapter 42 . 5/26/2014
A single review won't do justice on how much I am excited about this fic. After months of searching FF for well-written and updated Naruto fics I've finally found a hidden gem. So thanks and uhh please update
| sendicard chapter 28 . 5/8/2014
So... My only real wonder here would be how Kakashi and Naruto managed to get into a Resengan and Chidori level fight without anyone but them finding out or interrupting. I mean, damn! Some fucking awesome silence seals, I want that shit...
So you never went into it but do any of the characters really have a special look? I mean all your descriptions of their attire have been pretty basic. I work off of mental images so my lack of character look images has become a problem at times. Kind of hard to feel out an emotional scene when you're wondering through like 300 different design schemes. Just wondering if anyone's ever made any fan-art that you feel is pretty close... or anything.
| sendicard chapter 27 . 5/7/2014
Haha, they went full on psychic with predicting his secret weapons. Poor bastard, I've actually done that to my cousin before. He's younger and carries around a LOT of weapons, including a blow torch. So when I left him alone in my house once, I suddenly turned before leaving and confiscated like 6 different hidden weapons without even looking at him. "The one in your shoe please," "I know you have one in your sleeve." Was a fun day.
While I feel that the "Reveal" with Hanabi was almost rushed, I still like the reaction. It's real, ish... Also kind of brings up some more red alert sighs, but that's something I've grown to like about her.
Ino's was great. It may be a fleshed out and done right version of one I bitch about in my profile, but it's done RIGHT! Like a cliche taken to level 11 before being covered in hot sauce.
| sendicard chapter 20 . 4/28/2014
"Well, could be worse," Naruto admitted with a hollow laugh. "Orochimaru could be my dad."
All i could think is "Oh fuck, don't think like that! Someone will make a spin off fanfiction about it!"
"Naruto was left staring in annoyed awe at the damned door."
All I could think is the hundred different things that could be running through his head. All the way from "Wonder if they make this in clothing?" to "Must apply to Konoha great wall!" Hell I even had a brief thought on "Wonder if I could apply this to condoms? Never have an unwanted pregnancy again!" Just want to cover myself in it and go into public insulting known gang members and bikers. I'd say the Mob but they might figure out a way around it... Crafty.
A puzzle box... Wow, that really is meaningful. Way to sell that so well by the way.
That Omake. the thing I love about your Omake is that they really could happen in the story, it's not just stupidly crazy shit. It has a real line of logic to it as well. It just turns out quite magnificently.
Hmm, if he doesn't at least tell Ino about the Kyuubi soon she'll learn through politics... That would suck.
| sendicard chapter 19 . 4/28/2014
Naurto", can't help but point out that showed up multiple times.
Sister? Ooouh, things are going to be fun!
| sendicard chapter 18 . 4/28/2014
"Secretyly", figure it out yourself, because personally I view the error as kind of a secret.
Also, you fuck up too/to a few times in this chapter.
Well I'm done with typos, just get a proper compatible word processor. Microsoft office and Libre Office work for fanfiction. At least I hear Libre does. Libre is free so, that's what I would get.
Personally I would agree with your "I'm not getting another word processor" speech but, well it's fucking up your beautiful work right? Why fight it when it's not a hard change. All word processors are pretty much the same when you get down to it.
| sendicard chapter 17 . 4/28/2014
"Wwho knew" another one, love it!
I recall Kakashi being Anko's ex-lover not... Fuck it, don't care for Hokage logic. I'll stick with crazy, so much more simple.
So when the hell is that reveal going to happen? You better not fuck it up, it's like the main thing I look forward to in a story. A fantastic "reveal" is something I actually fantasize about while reading. A horribly done reveal can be the difference between a "fantastic" story and a "Not worth reading." I once read a great story that fucking skipped it, like, time skip shit. Bullshit I say. Great story though.
Normally I expect it to be horrible but you make me expect at least moderate greatness.
"tradtional" Find it without Ctrl F and I'll give you some water.
"We gotta bet this guy and we'll be fifty ryou richer!" One, if I didn't know better I'd assume that's the legitimate line so... Nice typo.
Two, yay, 5 dollars!
"managing to doge a fifth" Well yes there is a dog in this situation, but I'm not sure what a doge is, and I'm also not entirely sure how you manage it. Must be like a bagel. A ninja bagel, most likely with wings but... Still a bagel.
"disapaited" Dissipated man, dissipated. That looks like some sort of bastard child of disappeared and ate... I get it, it disappeared because it was eaten by that word! Not sure if that's the proper word for that anyway...
Still, youre probably saner than nii-san."
This is actually another one where the first quote mark is taken off, but that's not the important part.
You're has a ' mark. So... Ya.
"Hizashi had beenwas his father."
You know that big thing at the bottom of your keyboard? It's called a "space bar," me bro; press it at new words. Not that the sentence works even with the space...
"moreweapons." Ouch, I'm thinking this was during that week where fanfiction was screwing up spaces... Then again it's kind of spaced out. Hahahah! Spaced out.
Just some typos and thoughts... Such.
| sendicard chapter 16 . 4/28/2014
I'm assuming that dream was a side effect from the seal? Probably a problem in the initial design. I recall you saying it flared his chakra to break the genjutsu, but you never said it got rid of it. It's highly possible the seal takes it in and gives it to him later, or that it traps it in his subconscious. A forceful effect of a design flaw. My own theory of course, obviously it could be different. That just seemed like something out of Tsukiyomi which is Itachi's signature genjutsu.
"wished he could be simply be a "
Figured if I'm already reviewing, might be a good idea to throw in a typo. I mean, some people really care about them.
I would like to put forward something that's bugged me straight from the beginning, the Kage Bunshin. At one point you called Naruto's different without really explaining it.
Another weird factor is that they seem to last more than a single hit, everyone's. That's not canon, and was never really given a reason. Most of the differences of your story from canon are explained somehow, but that never was.
"Idiotic," "pPanks?" Haha! WTF? Holy shit, woot. I love typos like that. It's at the end of the chapter, take you like 10 seconds to find it even if you don't use the Ctrl F function.
| sendicard chapter 15 . 4/28/2014
I know it's kind of stupid of me but I've never been good with Geography, or anything like it. Do you have a map including all these small countries and such? Kind of like that map Naruto had but like real, maybe on your computer or something? I'd love to be able to have the visual aid to help me understand the war and territories, which are undoubtedly important in this story. Cuz at the moment when you go off on a rant all I see is a shit load of "Kuni" and absolutely no image. Which is sad because I think and understand through images so I'm utterly lost.
Ahh, so she did hear the word Jinchuuriki and take it in, didn't seem like it. My apologies.
Shit, the loyalty seals are in Konoha? That isn't good...
| sendicard chapter 14 . 4/27/2014
Nice fights, Ino didn't even put forward notice that she heard the crack about Naruto's status as a Jinchuuriki. I get that she might not understand but to not even make note if it? Kind of weird...
| sendicard chapter 13 . 4/27/2014
"Incidentally, Shino says, 'Hi'." Haha, fucking knew it!
Poor Hanabi, even lashing out at those she cares about she's that fucked up by it.
"Because Naruto said so."
Fuck. As someone who knows quite a bit about psychology, seeing those words from a confused young girl to justify a situation like that with such certainty... I can't describe the amount of "Holy, fuck, SHIT!" signs of alert that brings. Nice job.
There were a lot of missing " symbols in this chapter... Took some time to figure out when people were talking and the narration ended... Sometimes.