Reviews for The Other Empire |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Juice means energy(to exert in this terminology) and jam means to make music. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Cheese is a powerful chao. Cream doesn't name all her chao cheese. Apparently, she only names them something dairy/ice cream related: Like Chocola (Heroes) or Milk (Colors DS). Cream doesn't kill Cheese when she uses her Chao Attack. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sorry to hear this is canned, but otherwise I like the concept of the two Botniks switching worlds and seeing how they react. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Damn it, UL. |
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![]() ![]() Cheese is a chao, a part of Chaos, who is a water-god, why would getting blown to pieces affect something thats made of water? |
![]() ![]() Chao are the children of Chaos, thats why. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ha! Great chapter, UL. It's both serious and hilarious. Cream the chao-killer...you know, I never really thought about that. XD Anyway, great work, and see ya next chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() You're kidding... You updated! Gosh. That was seriously unexpected. You didn't give me any impression you were updating, UL. Anyway, there's nothing to worry about. This chapter, in my opinion, went swell. Tails' thoughts at the beginning gave you a better view of him in this fiction, and it was quite freaky when you started to explain Cream being a Chao Killer. Although, you are correct - Throwing Chaos will kill 'em, most probably. Heh. She was quite confusing to begin with, but then she said she names all her Chaos 'Cheese' so I quickly got the picture. Amy's personality is great. Very funny, and still addicted to her 'Sonikku'. And, you are very good with Doctor Eggman when writing about him. It was a good chapter, UL. Update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hehe, not bad. Are the two universes ever gonna cross or just the two Robotniks? Guess I'll probably find that out by reading it...anyways... nice job. Looking forward to the next chapter :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well... i would have reviewed saturday, but then the site crashed, annoyed the hell out of me. But anyways i actually really liked it. Usually i'm not into the freedom fighters thing too often, but i liked the orignal idea of robotnik and eggman switching places. Keep up the good work, looking forward to more. ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good chapter. I don't know Bunnie and Sally that well, well... Sally's a princess, right? And, the two belong to a comic, and I think Sonic had a crush on that squirrel girl. Anyway, I like Bunnie's accent, it's funny. Good chapter, as I said before, and I look forward to your next update. You just had a little error at the end of the chapter, when you put "Still thinking herself paranoid, she brushed he warning away for a final time." I'm sure it was her warning... Of course it was. Heh heh. Good work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Heh heh. Poor Tails! He has to be kicked out. XD Very good chapter, and I laughed on the Cream & Amy scene. Very humorous in my view. The only criticism I can give is when someone says someone's name when they are speaking, there is a comer before the name and after. Okay. Onto the next chapter! This story is really progressing well. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hmm. Nice chapter, in my opinion. I mean, almost the same mistakes as I put in the last review. But, when someone is speaking and you put a paragraph whilst they are, I think it could be better if you add another speech mark at the beginning of that paragraph... If I make sense. Also, in one part where someone spoke, you didn't add any comer or full stop or similar. Yet, your later chapter will probably be better. Anyway, I still enjoyed the chapter, and... I haven't really read a story where Eggman is in it a lot. Good work! PM me if you don't get a clue on what I had just written. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice first chapter. Yet, I saw a few mistakes. One is where Eggman yells 'What's happening'. You put an exclamation mark, which is good, but it also needs a question mark because he's asking a question. Also, in some parts where people speak, you put comers AFTER the speech marks, heh. They are supposed to be before the speech marks, and you wouldn't have an exclamation mark and a comer at the end of someone speaking together. Just one will do. However, I have a feeling you've improved with that in later chapters. So, I'm going to read the next few. Your description is good when you explain on what certain things look like, and I'd say you've got Eggman's personality well. Great work! Heh. |