Reviews for BITE
Lucinda Silver chapter 20 . 8/26
I love the ending line, it's suit Eli's personality very well. And I was amused at the fact it was a vampire rabbit was the cause of the scar on that.

However, I'm far more concerned that "vampire" bunny could, oh I don't know, turn someone since it has no morals and human mind to control the thirst. Have I mentioned it's a vampire bunny? I once saw bunny slippers that have fangs. Most amusing.

Plus, I'm glad that thing about Bella finally go on that midcrisis newborn phase. She has to be remind that there's a price in becoming a vampire and there are consequences. In the canon, I felt bad for Jasper because all newborns are just that newborns and Bella shouldn't be any different. It really irritate me, new naive view and happy ever view yeah and I love the character development of Eli as well as her visiting to the priest. It's the best thing in the story because usually many stories are not like that, the character development and just happy go lucky, hmmph.

Anyway, wonderful story, author! Bless your creativity and beautiful mind!
bellaamoore9 chapter 20 . 4/18/2015
The end about the rabbit had me hysterically laughing
Captain Lycan chapter 20 . 12/9/2010
The ending was absolutlely wonderful, I had the feeling Pawel was gonna bite the bullet, I felt so sorry for poor Elie. I'm glad though Gregorio stopped her trying to bring him back. Elie's interveiw with Leah was cool but it would've interesting to see her reation to Jacob imprinting on Reneesme. On another note there's a tremendous amount fun to be had with the idea of vampires going to AA-type meetings. Lastly, I was trying to figure out how Gregorio got that scar and THAT was not what I had come up with, was by any chance Monty Python and the Holy Grail an inspiration? Elie should definately track her kid down _!
Captain Lycan chapter 17 . 12/8/2010
Wow... you pretty much summed up everything about the twilight saga that got on my nerves. It really felt like Bella sold her soul and didn't even seem to pay the price for it, nice to see some consequnce in this. I also loved the intercation between Ward and Elie. He really did warn Bella being a vampire wasn't all it was cracked up to be. I can't wait to get to the ending!
Captain Lycan chapter 11 . 12/7/2010
Way to go Gregorio! I loved Elie's reaction to Jacob and Reneesme, she did kind of creep me out in the book. I also enjoyed her interaction with Bella, honestly Meyer could've created a slightly more likable antagonist. Aw well once a great story!
Captain Lycan chapter 7 . 12/6/2010
What an amazing story you've got going here _! Elie's probalbly one of the most complex OC's I've come across easily on par Master of the Boot's Joham Devenpeck or EBZ's Zohall Mercer.
heheyhey chapter 20 . 4/15/2010
I loved it. Especially the part about the rabbit! :) That was gold.
dcoram chapter 17 . 3/24/2010
HA! This scene was so hilarious! Cleverly funny my dear. As I read,I pictured you, sitting at your computer, eagerly typing and giggling at your own hilarity, which seems to be without effort. I've always loved you Bev AND your humor. Must be why I enjoy your writings. Be proud Bev. You're so good! But poor Seth!
dcoram chapter 10 . 3/24/2010
"Ward", Bev. Why ya gotta be so hard on my Edward? Ward? Ugh!
EclipsedbyJacob chapter 20 . 10/16/2009
Had I not taken a week long break between reading, I totally would have guessed the rabbit. i remember wondering about it early on.

Anyway, I was a little scared by your comment that it was too happy an ending in the last chap, and when I started this one, it was all really touching. Almost had me tearing which is not easy to do.

Love this story! Thank you for writing it! I'm interested to see what else you have up your sleeve...
EclipsedbyJacob chapter 19 . 10/16/2009
Even though you said I'd never guess, I'm going to anyway.

The scar:

A death kiss from a vampire when he was changing (perhaps from ELie herself?)

Or, his human wife hit him really, really hard...

Either way, loved the kiss, and the surprise promotion! Yay! No more bad feelings about Greg! Yay for Greg!
EclipsedbyJacob chapter 18 . 10/16/2009
See...I knew he was up to no good. Stupid bloodsucking Greg...

What kind of a name is Greg anyways? (I know there's still the possibility that I'll eat my words later, but he doesn't sit right with me, though he is suave when he wants to be...just not sure how much trust good ol Greg is due...)

Wondering if Elie is on her knees doing more than grovelling while Greg looks on? me wondering...
EclipsedbyJacob chapter 17 . 10/16/2009
Oh, this was good! I understand the bit about needing BD therapy. I had to rewrite the Volturi encounter to move on. I mean, all the BS on if there's been a fight, not all of the Cullens would have survived, and I'm thinking, only if that's the way you write it, Steph. And, don't even get me started on Renesme...I forget she existed. I have never even tried to wrap my mind around it.

On the other hand, its good to see Bella all torn up, and it totally makes sense that Elie and Leah would be friends. It wasn't that she hated vamps, she just hadn't met the right one yet...
EclipsedbyJacob chapter 16 . 10/16/2009
You are really brilliant. You know that right? Even if you say it wasn't planned out, everything is very smooth and engaging. And to be honest, I'm still not sure if i trust ol Greg 100% yet...
EclipsedbyJacob chapter 15 . 10/16/2009
I can see the relationship building between Edward and Elie and that's nice. Its hard to see anyone hate my all time fav bronze haired vamp. Wonder what's up with Bella, and the moments between E and G are so sweet! i lvoe this story!
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