|Reviews for The Unseen War II: Shattered Dreams|
| Black' Victor Cachat chapter 5 . 9/20
Huh, having Noghri along would have been pretty useful when Chewie went to rescue Han when he was a captive of Yventha now that I think of it, seeing as how they owed a debt of honour to the man via Leia too. Scratch that, a whole lot of canon issues would have been solved easier if they let the near undetectable killing machines come along more often (poor Zahn). They would definitely run out of buckets then
Any suspicions of Sesh now have stronger basis than just canon now given that we know from Chewie that there was an escape pod. Ship damage must be serious if Leia could not just see any missing escape pods, unless the attackers came back and shot the Falcon up more to hide that fact
Lovely, now Tierce is in play. Another possible mastermind playing his games to worry about. Of course, that just makes the story even more juice!
And it looks like Pellaeon's little side project is getting out now, which will just add to the lovely tension
| Black' Victor Cachat chapter 4 . 9/20
What I appreciate about Lando's message to Leia was the emphasis in making sure she knew that she still had friends there for her
Darth Torious really gives the impression of what Anakin Skywalker would have been like as a rogue warlord or if he had gone to the Dark Side on his own: powerful, dangerous, full of rage, and nigh unstoppable wherever he attacked with a light party
| Black' Victor Cachat chapter 3 . 9/19
Appreciate how you adapted Solusar from Dark Empire, and how you removed potential troublesome characters while simultaneously emphasizing how dangerous these missions actually are. Pretty dangerous team overall, basically a hybrid between a Black Ops Republic team and Jedi, operating on the sly. Nice work with Kirana Ti, woman from a far less developed world, and a different language and culture, adapting to this new life
Nothing like a third party with their own agenda that you are not prepared for (and when you are fully focused on known threats) to throw everything into chaos
Aww crud! Targeting Han and the kids is a brilliant strategic move. Killing Han takes away one of the best admirals in the Republic, and perhaps more importantly to an enemy mastermind, a man famous for unconventional tactics and strategies who survived for so long by being unpredictable. And of course, killing them all off will do "wonders" (sarcasm) for Leia's mental health
By the way, should thank you for your Mara/Luke work, helped me a bit for my own Avengers fic for Natasha/Bruce (Natasha is a former KGB assassin if you have not seen the movies)
| Black' Victor Cachat chapter 2 . 9/19
LOL when Mara gets her hands on Lando :-D
If you cannot talk to your husband about your actions, that should be a pretty good hint about them
Oooooh, that's not good with Pellaeon. And the worst thing is that he is still a good man with good motivations. I mean, just point to Palpatine as an example, or implications about Leia and the Kaut senator and it is easy to understand his motivations if not his methods. Kudos to how careful the security for the Special Weapons branch is, not taking any chances
By the way, I never really mentioned before, but I like how you flow between different sections of your story, linking the last words of the previous section with the first of the next one. Flows well, and original too
| Black' Victor Cachat chapter 1 . 9/19
Whelp, Anakin II is making his move to fame. Also does explain that little mystery of why the clones used a subpar fighting style, and why they kept going after Luke and Mara despite their lack of success: creating an even more skilled master at the lightsaber
Appreciate the timing of Mara and Luke's relationship going to that new level, showing how they did take it steady which as shown was a slight concern for them before
| December Wind chapter 5 . 7/12
What happened? ! You can't just drop off the face of the earth and leave us with a cliffie like that!
| MrSergo15 chapter 1 . 4/12
This is one of my favorite Star Wars stories out there and it is said to see it 'dead'. I as well as many others would be very glad if you finish it and you are quite a talented writer by the way.
| WelcomeToTheLegend chapter 5 . 4/4
I don't suppose you have even the slightest intention to continue this? Because quite frankly this is my favorite retelling of the Star Wars EU. Ever. Seriously, the properly done Mara/Luke bits would be enough but the rest of it is phenomenal gravy.
| sreekantham chapter 5 . 8/24/2014
Great story! Great characters. You should finish.
| Brave November chapter 5 . 1/3/2014
You. . .you destroyed the Falcon. Okay, not completely, not irrevocably, but still. . .
And then you didn't update. For years.
I am inconsolable.
| Guest chapter 5 . 7/27/2013
Any chance that this will be updated?
| maesde chapter 5 . 7/4/2013
Please please continue this story! it's darn epic!
| bec chapter 5 . 8/25/2012
What did Luke know? Are they really gone? There were no bodies, therefore they can't be. PLEASE FINISH THIS STORY!
| bec chapter 1 . 8/24/2012
Okay, I knew part three had not been written yet but this part two is a WIP? I am begging you to finish this story. It is so much better than the crap that is published. Please remember this is fan fiction!So who cares what has happened in the profic. Don't let it get you down, keep up the true spirit of Star Wars!
P.S while I am begging, please let LukeandMara have a baby, but if you do I will want a story about how he grows up and his character develops.
(using the Jedi mind trick) YOU WILL REDISCOVER YOUR LOVE FOR STAR WARS. YOURMUSE WILL RETURN. YOU WILL FINISH THIS PART TWO. YOU WILL WRITE PART THREE! BECAUSE YOU ARE A GREAT WRITER! "There is no try, only do or do not." Actually there is no do not either.
(Did it work?)
| viralhybrid29 chapter 1 . 8/17/2012
Please finish this story.