Reviews for The Unseen War II: Shattered Dreams
kharmanc chapter 5 . 6/4
More Unseen War please! I love having so many players on the board - so many stories interwoven with the main plot. It brings to mind a juggler, the way you keep them all moving. And I *love* your transitions as you move between them. Come back soon!
DonR chapter 5 . 2/9
Just finished re-reading this and still as good as I remember. But why oh why don't you give us more, at least finishing off this story would be better than nice please. Been 8 years now. You say you are into Star Trek ; Enterprise now and as to Star Wars...well... so does this mean No More, Finish. Really do hope-wish you get your re-like mojo back for this and you can give us more soon. Thanks.
MaraSkywhiner chapter 5 . 3/1/2016
Wow. Just wow. This series is everything Star Wars should be. I don't expect an update after this long, but I want you to know that this series counts as one of the best SW fanfics I've ever read.
Darksnider05 chapter 5 . 1/20/2016
Hehe Darth Leia really want a scene where Leia pulls a Vader. " I am altering the deal. Pray I don't alter it any further. "
Guest chapter 1 . 10/9/2015
I see you haven't updated in awhile. I loved this story and really like the Luke Mara dynamic. I hope you find motivation to finish this.
Black' Victor Cachat chapter 5 . 9/20/2015
Huh, having Noghri along would have been pretty useful when Chewie went to rescue Han when he was a captive of Yventha now that I think of it, seeing as how they owed a debt of honour to the man via Leia too. Scratch that, a whole lot of canon issues would have been solved easier if they let the near undetectable killing machines come along more often (poor Zahn). They would definitely run out of buckets then

Any suspicions of Sesh now have stronger basis than just canon now given that we know from Chewie that there was an escape pod. Ship damage must be serious if Leia could not just see any missing escape pods, unless the attackers came back and shot the Falcon up more to hide that fact

Lovely, now Tierce is in play. Another possible mastermind playing his games to worry about. Of course, that just makes the story even more juice!
And it looks like Pellaeon's little side project is getting out now, which will just add to the lovely tension
Black' Victor Cachat chapter 4 . 9/20/2015
What I appreciate about Lando's message to Leia was the emphasis in making sure she knew that she still had friends there for her

Darth Torious really gives the impression of what Anakin Skywalker would have been like as a rogue warlord or if he had gone to the Dark Side on his own: powerful, dangerous, full of rage, and nigh unstoppable wherever he attacked with a light party
Black' Victor Cachat chapter 3 . 9/19/2015
Appreciate how you adapted Solusar from Dark Empire, and how you removed potential troublesome characters while simultaneously emphasizing how dangerous these missions actually are. Pretty dangerous team overall, basically a hybrid between a Black Ops Republic team and Jedi, operating on the sly. Nice work with Kirana Ti, woman from a far less developed world, and a different language and culture, adapting to this new life

Nothing like a third party with their own agenda that you are not prepared for (and when you are fully focused on known threats) to throw everything into chaos

Aww crud! Targeting Han and the kids is a brilliant strategic move. Killing Han takes away one of the best admirals in the Republic, and perhaps more importantly to an enemy mastermind, a man famous for unconventional tactics and strategies who survived for so long by being unpredictable. And of course, killing them all off will do "wonders" (sarcasm) for Leia's mental health

By the way, should thank you for your Mara/Luke work, helped me a bit for my own Avengers fic for Natasha/Bruce (Natasha is a former KGB assassin if you have not seen the movies)
Black' Victor Cachat chapter 2 . 9/19/2015
LOL when Mara gets her hands on Lando :-D

If you cannot talk to your husband about your actions, that should be a pretty good hint about them

Oooooh, that's not good with Pellaeon. And the worst thing is that he is still a good man with good motivations. I mean, just point to Palpatine as an example, or implications about Leia and the Kaut senator and it is easy to understand his motivations if not his methods. Kudos to how careful the security for the Special Weapons branch is, not taking any chances

By the way, I never really mentioned before, but I like how you flow between different sections of your story, linking the last words of the previous section with the first of the next one. Flows well, and original too
Black' Victor Cachat chapter 1 . 9/19/2015
Whelp, Anakin II is making his move to fame. Also does explain that little mystery of why the clones used a subpar fighting style, and why they kept going after Luke and Mara despite their lack of success: creating an even more skilled master at the lightsaber

Appreciate the timing of Mara and Luke's relationship going to that new level, showing how they did take it steady which as shown was a slight concern for them before
December Wind chapter 5 . 7/12/2015
What happened? ! You can't just drop off the face of the earth and leave us with a cliffie like that!
MrSergo15 chapter 1 . 4/12/2015
This is one of my favorite Star Wars stories out there and it is said to see it 'dead'. I as well as many others would be very glad if you finish it and you are quite a talented writer by the way.
WelcomeToTheLegend chapter 5 . 4/4/2015
I don't suppose you have even the slightest intention to continue this? Because quite frankly this is my favorite retelling of the Star Wars EU. Ever. Seriously, the properly done Mara/Luke bits would be enough but the rest of it is phenomenal gravy.
sreekantham chapter 5 . 8/24/2014
Great story! Great characters. You should finish.
Brave November chapter 5 . 1/3/2014
You. . .you destroyed the Falcon. Okay, not completely, not irrevocably, but still. . .

And then you didn't update. For years.

I am inconsolable.
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