Reviews for Harry Potter and the Unspeakable Time
Simianpower chapter 3 . 11/19/2017
Your "tee-hee I have a secret" is getting a bit old. The fake name bit is fun and all, but if your readers have no idea who is speaking or who they're speaking to, a lot of your dialog plot loses its impact. I find I don't really care about most of your characters since I don't know who they are or what motivates them. It's doubly bad because you're doing the same now with the canon characters. I have to keep decoding which is which, and that is incredibly annoying.

Charlemagne was obvious from chapter 1, and thus the whole shell game was pointless. The rest... well, now they have three names and several random personality changes from canon that haven't been explained, so I find I just don't give a damn. And that's the fault of intentionally cryptic writing. It's all well and good that uninvolved characters don't know, but keeping your readers in the dark just on a lark is a dickish literary technique.
Nihatclodra chapter 1 . 11/18/2017
Your foreshadowing that the unspeakables are the "Ministry 6" from the future are too obvious...
willam and jack and jake chapter 18 . 8/18/2017
nice love it
willam and jack and jake chapter 17 . 8/18/2017
cool well done
willam and jack and jake chapter 16 . 8/18/2017
well done
willam and jack and jake chapter 15 . 8/18/2017
very interesting
willam and jack and jake chapter 14 . 8/18/2017
nice very well done
willam and jack and jake chapter 13 . 8/18/2017
cool
willam and jack and jake chapter 12 . 8/18/2017
nice very nice
willam and jack and jake chapter 11 . 8/18/2017
nice
willam and jack and jake chapter 10 . 8/17/2017
oh no
willam and jack and jake chapter 9 . 8/17/2017
cool
willam and jack and jake chapter 8 . 8/17/2017
cool and well done
willam and jack and jake chapter 7 . 8/17/2017
nice very well done
willam and jack and jake chapter 6 . 8/15/2017
nice very nice
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