Reviews for Eternally Intertwined
lmc123 chapter 3 . 1/23
I love the way you write
winnodinno chapter 36 . 9/2/2015
For me, its not so much a carlisle that is spineless, but an Edward who doesn't seem to act like an individual who is 107 years old. Over 100 years old? There is no way in hell anyone could be telling me how to live my life. Mind reader, vampire and unlimited resources to boot. No way in hell...
jk chapter 25 . 7/1/2015
I don't get how bella can go 0 to 69 like a girl shows up whos prettier then her and bam shes saying sht like...your gonna leave me...
shes so pathetic
jk chapter 22 . 7/1/2015
I find it strange that Edward never noticed humans until bella...but he just met sappire and has talked about her pretty much non stop since...
and really? undeniably pretty? shes a ginger!
jk chapter 21 . 7/1/2015
why is bella freaking out about fucking ginger? no one really likes
jk chapter 1 . 7/1/2015
everywhere he goes there she is... he cant escape her!
does he mean from the lunchroom...where all the kids were and then in a class...? was that meant to be drama queen Edward? cause that was ridiculous. its like he sees her once and then sees her once more at the grocery store and hes like...shes stalking me! I cant get away from her
TrillionSchiffer chapter 45 . 5/19/2015
This whole things just reeks of writer convience, manipulation and forgetfulness.

First Alice see's jake enter Bellas room, which causes Edward to fly over there. But ALL OF A SUDDEN she can't see Angela and Jake approach.

Then this Daggett mental block crap. FOr one of them sure, but both? really?

And you tell me that they can't tell that those two were vampires? Because of what? a pair of flimsy contact? Are you serious? SMH.

This was suppose to fiction, not "unbelievable writer convenience and manipulation".

Its extremely crap that powers work when you 'need' them to work, and don't when you don't. Or convienently forgot what you wrote 2 to 5 chapters before.
TrillionSchiffer chapter 32 . 5/19/2015
Where did this fake ass murder mystery come from?
jk chapter 11 . 4/24/2015
dramatic much? the start of a war? theres only like seven wolves and six vampires! The start of a war! LOL Its gonna be the smallest war ever fought...LOL
A WAR haahahahahahahahah and we'll call the teeny tiny belwar of 2000 who gives a fuck
jk chapter 7 . 4/24/2015
Bella is soooo annoying. she spends all night thinking about Edward then shes mean to him and Edward says I like to use my couch for other hes some kind of man whore...
and you don't have them talk like they shoud expecially bella what kind of 17 year old says...I did not sleep well...shed abbrv...I didn't sleep do that a lot, not abbrv I mean.
jk chapter 5 . 4/24/2015
bellas kinda a douche bag, why cant she just say how she feels about jake? its not that hard just open your fucking mouth. And she comes off so fucking stupid with this im commited to him bullshit when its obvious to everyone that she really doesn't like him that much. That was bad timing for Edwards first kiss I was kinda awkward
jk chapter 4 . 4/24/2015
Anyone else finding alice annoying and rude as fuck? Edward hasn't liked a girl...ever! Bella just sits and Edward says five words to her and alice I all" hey no hogging all her attention!" Alice needs to back the fuck off! Stupid meddling annoying shopoaholic. I fucking hate alice. All happy all the time, overzealous little cunt. Id slap that girl
RDoster2012 chapter 51 . 8/17/2014
This story was very interesting to say the least...

It was refreshing and frustrating to see Carlisle portrayed this way... He was quite a jerk sometimes, But it was nice to see him as more than just a passive person.

I honestly thought that the Daggetts were true werewolves at first. Or witches... That was my reasoning for them being so hostile towards the Cullen's. I was happy to be proven wrong...

I did enjoy reading this story. In fact I could not put it down!
mygooddog chapter 14 . 5/11/2014
I like your teenage Edward and spunky Bella.
mygooddog chapter 13 . 5/11/2014
I like most of your story, but your Carlisle is OOC. He would never tell Edward to leave Bella if he knew how much he loved her.
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