|Reviews for The Real Us
| SomeGuyFawkes chapter 2 . 10/19/2008
LOVED Snape's shirt! :)
Several other good laughs too.
Great chapter, overall.
There appears to be a plot problem, so far. Dumbles goes on about the law but he ignored law and due process to help put Sirius away and deny Harry a proper home.
Not to mention that:
(1) Custody laws have always allowed for children to be removed from unfit relatives and placed with strangers.
(2) The wizarding world has been shown to care not one wit for any laws that either inconvenience the plot or annoy characters with any amount of "pull".
| SGBS4L chapter 1 . 10/19/2008
Well done, I loved your introduction, it is very well written gives a nice sense of where this story is gonna go and whats its about. Thanks for taking the time to do one and I look forward to reading this story.
| katdemon1895 chapter 5 . 10/19/2008
an excellent chapter, i like that harry took the other classes besides divination and comc, love that sirius, remus and snape were friendly and fascinated by the idea of a version 2 of the map and i like all this emphasis on the corruption of the ministry and i understand why you've made the twins not good guys, i was just informing you of me being pouty over it
having snape's patronus be a werewolf was an interesting touch and lol to hermione's patronus being called potter, that makes sense
the bit where hermione's parents sent presents was also a nice touch and i liked the part where harry thought of reasons why he didn't like the weasley's gift, and i agree, what the heck would you get a rat? calling crookshanks a tiger was cool too
thanks for replying to the other reviews and now onto the rest of the story
| SomeGuyFawkes chapter 1 . 10/19/2008
Correction to my previous review...
Of course, Dumbles should have known EXACTLY what was going on. He had ghosts, paintings, elves, armor, etc. at his command.
That he couldn't guess that the monster was a basilisk and take appropriate action defies belief.
Protected cages with roosters, every 50 feet, wouldn't even strain the school budget. The cages would be secretly monitored, of course.
| SomeGuyFawkes chapter 1 . 10/19/2008
This chapter was an introduction. Can't judge story until chapter 2...
Good, and common, questions except:
"Why didn’t anyone notice a person using a Horcrux during Chamber of Secrets?" - no one did use a horcrux, as a horcrux, until the very end.
There really was no reason for anyone (other than the twins) to notice more than they did and Percy DID notice something wrong. He just did not act or interpret well.
The twins, with their map, really dropped the ball repeatedly and, perhaps, unbelievably.
As for why Harry "suddenly" became attracted to Ginny, that can be as simple as two words: "D cups". ;-)
| katdemon1895 chapter 4 . 10/19/2008
once again uncomfortable with the sexual relationship between harry and hermione, though i am happy that they have a deeper bond than that from all their talks and training together
love that snape is a movie fan, especially that indiana comment- raiders of the lost arc is definately preferrable to temple of doom, lol to nick being terrified of ghostbusters, and the way you're filling in the plot holes that JKR left is brilliant and love that hermione is good enough at flying to be on a professional quidditch team
| Shaggy37 chapter 2 . 10/19/2008
Outstanding Actual Beginning! You've taken all of the things I have found wrong in so many fanfics and made them so much more believable!
| katdemon1895 chapter 3 . 10/19/2008
i'm a little uncomfortable with the level of sexuality but my objection is concerning the age not the action
other that this, this is a good chapter, i like that mcgonagall won money from snape and dumbledore- between the three she's my favorite and i'm glad that they're all getting training
having the tasks they went through as an advanced exam for the top students was a brilliant idea and makes a great deal more sense than dumbledore using them as defenses for a super powerful object
the more i think about it the more grandpappy firebird really fits dumbledore
| katdemon1895 chapter 2 . 10/19/2008
I always love your funny, snappy writing style, it's made my roommate give me more than one strange look when i burst out laughing and can't quite explain why since she doesn't read fanfiction
I absolutely adore the various nicknames, especially snape and his reluctance to admit his and loving everyone's reactions so far, giving mcgonagall a bowl of popcorn was a nice touch and the t-shirts were even better
feeling slightly pouty about the twins, glad that fred is alive and giggling over george's treatment of the matron but pouty at them going along with the family plan
| hayylies chapter 3 . 10/19/2008
haha i luv it!
| katdemon1895 chapter 1 . 10/19/2008
i'll be responding to each of these chapters as i read them so if i ask a question and its answered in the next already posted chapter please forgive me for that
also i'm very happy to see the story you promised and looking forward to see how you manage to make dumbledore and snape into heroes, i must confess a certain grudge against both characters- snape more than dumbledore but the grudge is still there so i'm very interested in this
| Satsuma Revolution chapter 3 . 10/19/2008
Hey, read this when it was first posted on the yahoo group. An excellent story, as most harmony stories are, & excellent way of explaining why Ron was kept around. Keep 'em coming & I'll keep readin'. :)